Open Poetry #25 |
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A Single Cell......... |
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Balladeer
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It was just a tiny cancer cell No different than most Well hidden as it fed upon The body of its host. As time went on it multiplied Destroying as it grew Though it was only microscopic Safely out of view. In time the patient realized That there was something wrong But he ignored the subtle warnings As time moved along. The cell had grown to millions now Its strength a thousand fold. Small functions were affected where The silent beast took hold. Physician diagnosis came Suggestions for a cure. He recommended chemo but The patient was not sure. "Chemo kills the good with bad", The patient sadly said. "I'll not accept a treatment where The good may wind up dead." And so procedures were delayed As cancer made its way Through unprotected areas Where vital organs lay. Invading each one easily It sealed the patient's fate. He screamed for any treatment but His actions came too late. The patient now lies cold and still. His life became a hell Because he did not act against A single cancer cell. * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * Terrorism is a disease... |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
![]() I knew you were going farther than a single cell would take us... and I am proud of what you have to say... because you say it, and stand behind what you say. |
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Martie
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Posts 28049California |
You packed a punch with this metaphor, Deer...and you got your point across. Well done! |
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bsquirrel![]()
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And the hit-and-miss war of chemo, that kills as many cells as it tries to save, is the cure. Nice poem. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
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wonderful work mr balladeer *smile* |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
This is an awesome signal...well sent. Ken J Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Bravo 'Deer! Excellent!! You said it perfectly! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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its a secret New Member
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, You did it again, ![]() |
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Balladeer
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Sunshine..thank you for the kind words. I'm not always right but I'm sincere ![]() Martie...please consider it a love-tap...I'd never punch you!!! ![]() Mikey...No, not as many good as bad when done with precision and care, otherwise it would not be so widely used....but certainly some. I appreciate the read.. jellybeans..how I love seeing your name. Thank you, miss!!! kayjay....I'm glad you enjoyed...I thank you. Enchanting one...if it pleased you then it was perfect indeed! ![]() it's a secret...thank you for honoring me with your first reply here... |
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regards2you Member Elite
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Posts 3940California |
Oh my gosh! Brilliant! Enjoyed greatly, Pat ![]() ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Balladeer
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Sy...I didn't mean to!! I'm innocent!!! ![]() hehe..Pat, you sneaked in there...thank you! ![]() [This message has been edited by Balladeer (03-31-2003 08:05 PM).] |
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Ringo![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Outstanding job with a great twist at the end. Another masterpiece. Imagine all the People living life in peace... |
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garysgirl![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Michael, you made your point very, very well. And, I think it's brilliant the way you did it, too!! Hugs ![]() Ethel |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
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Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() (big hugggssssssss) And sadly there appears to be terrorism everywhere now, not only through weapons but also in politics and dishonesty! (sad sigh) Terrorism will never be cured until we all aim for world peace, this is so well-said, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Balladeer, thank you for sharing! ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Ratleader![]()
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Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Alas that you are so right, Baladeer, in both venues. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Pascal Member
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Posts 54Ontario, Canada |
Incredibly powerful poem - such a strong message for everyone to heed the power of one small cell. Excellent! Pascal ![]() Believe in yourself and wonderous things will happen [This message has been edited by Pascal (03-31-2003 09:47 PM).] |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Just about as good as it gets....I know I usually say alot about nothing...even when it doesn't apply to the post....(as you so well described on the alley..LOL)....but I do that on purpose, only cuz I'm nuts...but this is superb my friend.... |
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Nan
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
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Just look at you working those metaphors and rhyme divine so masterfully... This ones intend gets you extra spammy smooches and some Vienna Sausages on the side!! You bringing the crackers? LOL ![]() ![]() "and when we get to the pearly gates ... |
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Denise
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I couldn't agree more, Michael. And things wouldn't be so tough now if we had started treatment a bit earlier, but we will survive. Great expression. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Michael...your words ring loud and true ![]() |
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suthern![]() ![]()
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Posts 20723Louisiana |
A great big fist of fear was clenching my heart ever tighter as I read... but it opened to applaud as I reached the end. It doesn't get any better than this, Bal... *S* Poetry at its finest... wisdom to be heeded. *S* |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
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Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ You did that 'thing' you always told me to do .... reach deep ! This is sincerely wonderful~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"Chemo kills the good with bad", The patient sadly said. "I'll not accept a treatment where The good may wind up dead." so very true, both in health and in your explanation of terrorism. Actually I believe this is one of the best poems on either subject. I hope you have it published somewhere...or as a letter to the editor hugssss M |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
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Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I understand sometimes they use "radiation" for cancer too....Am I mistaken Mike?... |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I knew while reading this that it reflected procrastination and it's affect but the ending really struck home and you did it perfectly ... but you always do sir. Wonderfully stated and a great way to get the point across. Loved the read and it's good to come back and be able to indulge in your works. |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Only you could have written such a beautiful piece of truth Deer. I'm with you all the way. ![]() Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
outstanding sir - what a twist - I look forward to more of your writting |
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Balladeer
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Thank you all for your comments and opinions. I appreciate you all.... Yes, Toe, it does..... |
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Larry C![]()
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
'deer, I love applying lessons of nature to life experiences. This makes a point in a way that the facts never could. Very well done again. I love it! ![]() If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Gunslinger Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 901TX, USA |
Excellent, my 'deer friend. I applaud radical treatment for both diseases! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Balladeer - Damn, how true you write of this. My younger brother knew something was not right but let it go until it was too late. I hope just one of all who reads this inspires them to do something if they don't feel well. Thanks for this... BC |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome...that's all I can seem to say |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Awesome write here - am just in awe of how you compared the two - to the T and with a punch . . . you drove it home . . . xxoo |
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morefiah Member
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Posts 150Spanish Town, Jamaica |
An excellent write. I thoroughly enjoyed it. I am not sure I understand exactly what your point about terrorism is though... Terrorism as a term can itself be a metaphor can't it? I am with you however, that inaction (the correct action) is a sure way to invite dire consequences. I repeat that this is an excellent poem whatever one believes. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
What an awesome metaphor for a terrifying event on both levels. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
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Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
![]() If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
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Fantastic! 'Deer... fantastic! ![]() adding to my library Maree ![]() |
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