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Doormat Blues
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Doormat Blues |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia 
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My mind tells me it must be a dream but sad it appears I know it reality For in place of flesh and bone I have fondly come to know a square foot of drab carpeting lies where the body once was between my head and toes in grand final insult embroidered upon my face the letters W-E-L-C-O-M-E stand out clear as day. Like a stampede of deformed bovines I see them come rushing rushing in and out leaving dirty footprints everyone From large ugly women in ten inch heels to lanky loafer clad salesman each feeling the need to take their turn "well lets not dirty the house with mud and such for what other purpose does this mat here lie?" "What Purpose indeed!" I grumble muffled beneath fabric mouth as yet another muddy shoe plants itself on my carpet brow After many days and nights of comings and goings loafers, heels, boots and smelly disgusting and filthy my usefulness comes to an end So off to the store the owner skips with glee to find another poor mat just like me. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Wal-mart's got 'em 2 for 1!!  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Had to read this twice to get it. Sorry it's Monday..but wow..I loved it. It's not fun being a doormat for sure...but doesn't a doormat have to lay down and take it? Susan |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
thanks for reading. Yes a doormat does. I guess sometimes you jsut feel this way |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yeah, sometimes you just feel this way...sigh |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
I feel like a doormat most days too! You described it wonderfully! LOL great job!!! Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
thank you |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Brad, The grin on my face is only because you captured the feeling so well. Enjoyed this perspective. Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I loved the view from this. It's a favored exercize of mine as well, to take an aninimate object and have it speak for my metaphor. Well done, me friend! |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
thank you. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Awesome write Brad - as always - liked how you used the "Welcome" here - doormat - ha - truly - know this - xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (04-02-2003 05:16 AM).] |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
thank you |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
wonderfully detailed excellent metaphor use!!! love this |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
there are always greener pastures to lay down upon, really, trust me on this one |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
I enjoyed this one - its well written & descriptive - funny & sad - wow also makes me hope I never reincarnate as a doormat - lol |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BradMajors~ I GREATLY enjoyed this read~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Dan, Seriously, can you redo this on reflections for submission? Susan |
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