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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore 
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My dynamic selves force mismatch of life's pieces ditching me in mess I must draw the best fit line to confidently move on |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
many parts = one self, boring otherwise |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
kaile, very good I really like it Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
kaile - this is lovely - a thin line indeed xxoo |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Very cool write! I especially liked the dynamic selves...so often we forget to take stock of what drive us. Excellent. ThisDiamond |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Kaile, I'll bet I've read this at least five times, mulling it over, deciding if I could relate. My own denial, often keeps me from knowing who I am. Think I am pass the stage of mess, but, of course the deciding factor will be what happens today, or any day. Like to say I'm constantly level-headed but I don't lie anymore...grinning here.... I do try to confidently move on, selecting the best of myself especially when dealing with others. Well, I try..... You caused me to think and that is the sign of a good poem. My answer, perhaps not all what your intent was. That's my norm. Thanks, And, I do recognize the 5-7-5-7-7, tho. cannot recall the name... Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kaile, your Tanka is wonderful. I wonder how many of us would admit to more than one self within? I'm afraid many of us would deny that we have dark thoughts, or weird moments, some of us are ashamed to acknowledge the truths of us that others see but are too polite to mention. Hence the ditch. But in drawing upon the best we can do, acknowledging until we know more, know better, educating ourselves with one more step...that is where the confidence comes to move on. I do wish you had marked this as a book submission for it is truly a fine reflection.... |
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Goldboat Member
since 2003-02-17
Posts 66 |
Very good! I like this. |
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