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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2003-03-30 02:09 PM

I recall that morning.
The sun fell like December in the snow.
How you go.

You didn't leave a letter,
just your voice commanding one last No.
How we grow.

I thought that we were feeling,
that we were revealing
a lingering,
a growing touch.
I was no more
than your crutch.

We had walked a mile
and you left me on the black ice road,
feeling old.

I watched the broken trees.
I wrote this poetry.
So.
Now you know.

Stella was a diver and she was always down.
Interpol

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2003-03-30 02:17 PM

such a tone of resignation.

It breaks my heart into a few more pieces.

sigh...

I am only wondering if they ever REALLY know.

Hugs.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2003-03-30 03:36 PM

Walking on black ice, alone.
How very, very sad.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

3 posted 2003-03-30 05:21 PM

Mikey - this one bleeds . . .

We had walked a mile
and you left me on the black ice road,
feeling old.

how I know this feeling - wish I didnt - this one hit me . . . xxoo

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2003-03-30 05:42 PM

The problem is they already knew way before us...James

Ringo

Member Elite

since 2003-02-20

Posts 3684
Saluting with misty eyes

5 posted 2003-03-30 05:56 PM

The sun fell like December in the snow.
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This is one of the more discriptive lines I've seen on here. Absolutely outstanding job.

Imagine all the People living life in peace...
John Lennon

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

6 posted 2003-03-30 06:03 PM

Squirrel dude, you've painted this in glazes.

It's a wistful beauty

friend wranx

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

7 posted 2003-03-30 07:28 PM

Thanks, everyone. A song dislodged a memory.

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

8 posted 2003-03-30 10:37 PM

you are amazing....and I miss so much when I am not around often.....(smacks forehead) maybe I should drink more V-8...

Lauren~

I close my eyes and there in the shadows I see your light
You come to me out of my dreams
Across the night

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

9 posted 2003-03-30 11:17 PM

arghhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh too many thoughts and memories dislodged here..while this deals with a romantic loss i took it for something else..but i know both..ah forget it i'm a mess..

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (03-30-2003 11:29 PM).]

CSKpoet
Senior Member

since 2002-07-12

Posts 845
Island in Paradise

10 posted 2003-03-30 11:24 PM

ahh this is so sad ..big hugs to you
she musta been a bit lame..
nice write...take care, my friend,
Cher

Poetry is:
Passion, imagination and intellect running together.

Aloha with warmest regards, Cheryl Stewart Koomoa

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