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This Side of Heaven
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This Side of Heaven |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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He asked me to tell him what I was thinking, as I choked on my words and swallowed them whole. Tell me what you see when you reach beyond your wildest dreams and how does it feel when you get that close to the edge? Do you fear the unknown or do you want to throw caution to the wind. How long can you stand to waver in the same place? Be brave and hold onto me. I lifted my hands and turned my face toward the sky wishing upon the stars, tingling in their twinkling. I thought to myself, let me go, and let me dream the impossible dream, just once. Instead I replied, I wish the time to remain on this side of heaven, held in your embrace that keeps me poised when I lack the composure that threatens to alter my state of mind. Be gentle and let me down easy. I asked him if he had an inkling as to what I was thinking when the right words didn't come, and if he knew how to read lips, need I go on? He replied with a nod, feel free to go on and on. Be specific, and let me take you there. Tell me when to stop at any point that interests you, take all the time you need. And I replied, I'm almost there, there, in the certainty of knowing that he always knew and how we came to be. A dream within a dream. As he stood to draw the shades and let the light filter through in those wide eye moments that we keep when we are one. Breathing life with a single sigh, that comes with the sweet releasing Completing. ~*~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (03-29-2003 06:06 PM).] |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
if only the old ball and chain could do it.........oh well, theres always dreammen to fill that need |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
This is beyond incredible! You have a brilliant mind. I loved this.  Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori... "Instead I replied, I wish the time to remain on this side of heaven, held in your embrace that keeps me poised when I lack the composure that threatens to alter my state of mind." it's not easy to be so wise. Emotive and personal and honest.  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I should stop reading those romance novels. You ever notice how happy they are, and how great their sex life is!! Dream on! I'm just kidding, I'm sure some fairy tales do come true.Thanks for reading me Michele, Saunni, and Martie~ Hugs to all three of you~ |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Lori, "dream within a dream" And this is a layer upon a layer. I have read this three times and come away with a little different, deeper meaning each time. Some parts of this just stay with me. Must have tapped something within me I forgot or never recognized. Enjoyed greatly, Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
we can always dream can't we ...that's something no one can take away from us... hugss M |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...I think you'll get your chance...made me think of that Roy Orbison song "In dreams I walk with you, in dreams I talk to you, in dreams you're mine all of the time." James |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lori, Your lace is very fine, chantilly I think. Enjoyed |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Oh yes, but only the brilliance of the female mind could outshine the brilliance of the female heart. Smiles from TD |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) I too get that curse from reading romance novels, I wish I could be like that and be as happy as the characters in Danielle Steel's books or other romance novels are while I don't seem to be getting anywhere at the moment! (sad sigh) This is a well emotive write, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Blues - take your five seperated lines and everything is right there - what a lovely write you have here - as always - singing me a song . . . xxoo |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Bluesypoetess, this is FINE! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I'll be saving this one in my fave files. Please, don't ever stop sharing your dreams and fantasies! This is exquisite. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lori! How times have changed...I like this and what it implies.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you for walking into my dream, and sharing the best part of it. It's so nice of you ALL and I'm so glad you were here. |
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