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morning (in c minor) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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There are really crystal mornings when the air lifts the lung there is peach fuzz on the sky as burgundies of night are ripe and symphonies are visual vivaldi must have gazed on this... the mandolin has wings of bird and violin in string of flight-- dancing in the hammering of a finger's nervousness. oh-my-soul I know the feel of wings tucked in spiral climb... head in duck beneath a wing dizzy spin of a drill bit, mine I claim it is all mine breaking clouds in opening blue between the white and gray-- that's the way the feathers fall... [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (03-28-2003 12:30 PM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Vivaldi... is smiling... so am I  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
There are really crystal mornings when the air lifts the lung there is peach fuzz on the sky as burgundies of night are ripe and symphonies are visual vivaldi must have gazed on this... the mandolin has wings of bird and violin in string of flight-- dancing in the hammering of a finger's nervousness. ================================== ok..thats it..... *breaking me pen* *shaking me head at YOU* damn..........I wanna write like this when I grow up!!!!!! Do you know how cool this is?????????? sheesh....mere mortal moths cant even put it into words..... You ROCK baby...and rolls me   "and when we get to the pearly gates ... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Beautiful... Susan |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ Now this is just GREAT~ Felt the touch of poetess-in-ink~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This floated down the page as a feather would float in a delicate dance... What JM said...and more...lol... Beautiful...perfectly beautiful Karen. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
K- I do believe this is my favorite - and quite possibly one of the best? Not right word - adored - there ya go - works I have read so far - mannn - you had me there - ready for flight . . . perched . . . feeling that wind upon my face - and yes, Vivaldi did see this and you know? He is playing in tune to your words . . . this is awesome . . . love it with everything - *pat yourself on the back* This is a concerto . . . xxoo |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, Exceptional write, a keeper and weeper, You are a delight. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
serenity....you put a lot of wonderful into this one!!!  |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Now, how is a Brother supposed to write when he sees something like this? This write had it ALL... imagery, wording, pace... Perhaps one day I will figure out your secret. I would definatley have voted this one in the book if you had chosen to include it. Imagine all the People living life in peace... |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
oh my god.... the way the feathers fall..... I want to read this forever yes this SHINES almost captured ALL of your light with these visions ......my god |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Karen - wow...this one is a  and going into my library! Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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OLIAS Senior Member
since 2000-06-20
Posts 1090Pearl city Iowa |
Your words are sweet music to my ears, much enjoyed. Thank you for sharing, take care. Olias. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You all have me hugging me again!  I actually kinda like this one! and hugs to m.o.m.s. it's good to have you home. and OLIAS....lausy...where the hell have ya been? shaking my head-- this is a GREAT place to call home. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity blaze - now I understand fully where the words come from. One glides into the land of the cypress, sits in the quiet of the night and listens to the whispers of them, and in come the words. Then out they go onto these pages. A'hhh, now I know... BC |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) It is all yours for the taking, and oddly enough there is so much more to go around as long as the mandolin is in fashion! (kiss on cheek) I love how your poems are toned with sharpness and tempo, this gracefully touched my heart, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
There are mornings like this? I wake up at 6am I've yet to feel one of these in a loooooong time..and you had me at Vivaldi [This message has been edited by Aenimal (03-28-2003 09:45 PM).] |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
(damnedwitchmumblegrumble) You KINDA liked this!?! This - it - you, could not have been done better! ~yeti |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Yes, I have to agree, this is just exquisite. Truly a work of written art. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Goodness gracious, Karen..... This is amazingly beautiful!!!!  Heart Hugs,  Ethel |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Serenity~ I sure wish you could load me your muse for about 2 years. Enjoyed very much...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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