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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
Antonym By: Noah Eaton 3/27/03 Guess I believe I feel alright I am convinced I can still see the sunlight Deep through this apathy I still recognize the night I know it’s hell out there For every honest man it’s a hard time… Seems just like another Eleusinian mystery But the robin is nowhere to be seen Even the dolphins are on itineration On an eyre through an ensanguined sea… It’s not this sty That is inflaming my eyes I conceive… It feels like an asylum to me So many faces standing still Never being listened upon… It’s easy for you to say, “What’s the use of speaking anyway?” Even in this grand compurgation No one is making a resolution today Electrovalence Seems the only way to move this train… It feels like an asylum to me So many faces standing still Never being listened upon… Break your profound speech from dactylic hexameter To iambic pentameter If you wish to speak Make it quick, I have a lot of homework Using nothing but Cliff notes Claiming you have the original draft of the truth… Intimations of immortality Misunderstood Imitations of democracy No use re-writing them if you could Antonyms Spoken from the bugles of tanks Speaking, “We’ve come to set you free!” When everyone is crying? When everyone is bleeding When everyone is protesting And everyone is analyzing When you can’t tell who is honest And you can’t tell who is lying Where is the indelible line Of what’s theirs and what is yours and mine? It’s not this sty That is inflaming my eyes I conceive… "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (03-27-2003 07:50 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sometimes, Noah, I wish I could be your age again, to live in a world that is so far advanced from the world I grew up in - but have had to keep up WITH... I envy you. You are me, four decades later. But you are better than I ever was at your age - I see you do so much - for your community, your school, and this website. I envy you. And my hope is, that the things that are going on now, to give you reason to write as you do, gives you the reason to have a place to continue writing for decades to come. Hugs... |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Noah - this is quite amazing - mannn - always amazing you are: Using nothing but Cliff notes Claiming you have the original draft of the truth… You got it . . . sadly - loved this xxoo |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Whoa Noah! May I just say... everything that Sunshine said!  You are so very intelligent and are going to go a long long way with your kind of writing ability. Just amazing!! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Noah, your heart speaks and you weave wisdom through it. So many unsolved questions give pain. May humankind awaken to Love, so that dolphins and robins can be again fully enjoyed by all inhabitants of the world. Love, Margherita |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
yanno Noah? you are one intriguing poet--that first stanza started out in a kind of bluesy man-to-man type of tone and then ya turned it all around on me to end in classical voice-- you left me smiling, as ya always do! <---proof  very clever, considering yer title and subject-- chuckle [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (03-28-2003 11:54 AM).] |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
When everyone is crying? When everyone is bleeding When everyone is protesting And everyone is analyzing When you can’t tell who is honest And you can’t tell who is lying Where is the indelible line Of what’s theirs and what is yours and mine? Noah, You have a bright and quick mind along with your loving heart. You will go far my friend. Teach the children. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Noah the texture of this write is so clear and crisp to the hear. Very well done. TD |
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Hypnosis Member
since 2001-12-02
Posts 325CO |
My friend, I must say that your poetry has come so far within these past few years, and you just keep getting better and better at it all the time, i love this piece very much, you use such great words to express your thoughts and emotions. Your friend Randy Meador a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
very nice |
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