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Death Becomes Me - A Duet by serenity & littlewing
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Death Becomes Me - A Duet by serenity & littlewing |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York 
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"Death Becomes Me" A Duet by Serenity & Littlewing Streaks of gray upon white stone tracing every finger feel eyes dancing on the lines secrets gasping to be revealed but I know - yes, I do recall . . . An angel dancing every step jumping from measure to rest like the first time the pitter patter rang true the chiming of the "me" to "you" The note that is the most obscure is the one that sounds the PEEL I feel a concerto in heaven resounding in my heart still we remain apart . . . Silk laden sheets as smooth as the stone smelling of starch and yearning for home breath caught in the wind carried like lavendar on morning breeze yes, I have found my path with ease... Upon the stone fingers trace back to you shades of gray on white are blue lost but for here - my soul eternal blessed just like all the rest . . . and I forgot to buy flowers I always forget the flowers . . . [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (03-27-2003 04:22 AM).] |
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Ringo 
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
"Silk laden sheets as smooth as the stone smelling of starch and yearning for home" This is one of the more interesting lines you have posted yet. "and I forgot to buy flowers I always forget the flowers . . ." Definately something a man would say lol. You ladies have done a very nice job here. I look forward to more. Imagine all the People living life in peace... |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
You two did a very good job with this piece.....well done!! Charisma |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A new dynamic duo - an amazing duet! Do it again! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Silk laden sheets as smooth as the stone smelling of starch and yearning for home breath caught in the wind carried like lavendar on morning breeze yes, I have found my path with ease... Upon the stone fingers trace back to you shades of gray on white are blue lost but for here - my soul eternal blessed just like all the rest . . . and I forgot to buy flowers I always forget the flowers . . . ============================== stunning "insyncness" is that a word? tis now!!  so lovely me ladies...hauntingly lovely. mothyme "and when we get to the pearly gates ... |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...a work of art. Eric |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sue and Karen....  Another, please? Heart hugs to both of you  Ethel |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Brad: heheheh - that was both of us there at the end . . . go figure - thank you Charisma - am glad you liked! Sunshine - dynamic duo - hehehe TY - more like wondertwin powers activate . . . form of . . . lol thank you Janet - hauntingly lovely = yes . . . it is - thank you so much! Ericc - so sweet your words - art . . . arent we all? Ethel: thank you - hehehe took a week to get this one out . . . hugs back to you - my friend thank you so much Thanks guys xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (03-27-2003 11:24 AM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Silk laden sheets as smooth as the stone smelling of starch and yearning for home breath caught in the wind carried like lavendar on morning breeze yes, I have found my path with ease... Upon the stone fingers trace back to you shades of gray on white are blue lost but for here - my soul eternal blessed just like all the rest . . . and I forgot to buy flowers I always forget the flowers . . ." =========================================== Fantastic!!! I love it!! I do hope we see more of the likes of this from the two of you!! ~Hugs to you both, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Quite a deed girls. I enjoyed reading it and ....rereading it. Love and my compliments. Margherita |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Nancy - thank you - this was an interesting eve . . . hehehehe . . . Margherita - yes - this one DOES take an extra read now doesnt it lol - look at he last lines - closely . . . thank you xxoo |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Applause from me to Sue. Thank you sweet lady--this was fun, and I really enjoyed the spark of your muse here. and thank all the good poet people for your generosity of praise and encouragment. sheesh...I sound like a speechwriter now.  I'm outta here. to Sue! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
great work... more? regards, sudhir |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
An angel dancing every step jumping from measure to rest like the first time the pitter patter rang true the chiming of the "me" to "you" Excellent write!!! More please? Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
littlewing - oh my, a most stunning duet by two gifted writers. This is excellent. Now if I could entice to do a duet together, wellllllllllll.... BC |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A dynamite duet! ---and the readers chant, "We want more! We want more!" Peace, Love & Light to you both! Linda |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LittleWing and Serenity~ A truly remarkable blend-of-ink from two awesome poets~ Greatly enjoyed this read~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is an incredible duet, you blended perfectly. Sandra |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Congrats to you my spark of Serenity . . . an evening errr . . . morning well worth staying up to greet the sun . . . speechwriter huh? . . . Hugs Back xxoo Sudhir & Chris - thank you so much - so sweet . . . Linda - hahahahah - what is this a concert? TY Marge - humbled by your words . . . TY Bill - I would be most honored . . . Catalina - coming from you - means much - like that - a perfect blend TY Thanks guys xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (03-27-2003 11:49 AM).] |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I enjoyed the entire poem but the words in italics were especially meaningful to me. Kudos ladies~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
littlewing and serenity....Rich wording and melding of two...the last line, poignant. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Hey Blue - I didnt even see that until you pointed it out TY - that alone is an entirely new poem hmmmm . . . . Martie - the last line lmao - was just - it just had to be - ya know? xxoo |
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wings of the moon Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 323Pink bubblegum land |
beautiful... "An angel dancing every step jumping from measure to rest like the first time the pitter patter rang true the chiming of the "me" to "you"" one of the countless passages i'd want to quote... Its very good  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome piece! wow! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
wings (like the name - lol) that is my favorite part too . . . thank you James - thank you shadows - thank you so much xxoo |
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morefiah Member
since 2003-03-26
Posts 150Spanish Town, Jamaica |
You two are awesome!! God poetry is great isn't it. I just joined your fan club... umm, you didn't know you had one? STANDING OVATION please. |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
this is a beautiful! Rf |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Sue & Karen These were such beautiful words from two lovely ladies and I hope we can have a repeat performance. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
There is a beautiful dance moving within this. Still reading it. Watching it. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
more - fan club lol - yes poetry is amazing - my first love and thank you so much! Rf - thank you was lovely . . . Sue - hehehe looking for your smile - found it - and thank you . . . Ed - yes - you got it! Can be seen from many angles too - thank you Thanks guys xxoo |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Another thank you and curtsey. I enjoyed writing with Sue so much, that the memory, (okay, okay, so it's vague...grin) but she's a lovely lady, and so easy to write with--I'm sure her dance card will be full, if it isn't already. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
What a sweet thing to say K - I was honored to write with you (yes I see you rolling your eyes at "honored") but vague lmao - is ok - I remembered for us both . . . too sweet you are to me up there - you have taught me much in a short time - imprinted upon me always . . . thank you xxoo |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Brilliant me ladies, well worth the wait |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thanks Raph - good to see you back xxoo |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
An amazing amount of talent packed into this duet. This poem touched me deeply Liz |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Thank you Elizabeth - so nice to see you here . . . xxoo |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Good gravy! I missed this? A beautifull do-it you two, how's about another one? One to depict the coming of cool for Karen, so she can open the windows and doors perhaps? Lovely as usual, but then ... double the talent, double the fun, Passionate duets are better than one! |
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