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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 Vichyssoise By: Noah Eaton 3/26/03 Your face I still recognize How you predicate your honest image Back as long as I can remember It’s been eight long years since I saw you standing there At the gates of the closed amusement park You wanted to ride the Rainbow Even now I still see the ferris wheel horses in the rubble… There is a numbing feeling you can’t explain Condensed and concentrated but never microwaved Like cold soup for the simon-pure teenage soul Who’s kidnapped by Simon Legree and locked in Uncle Tom’s Cabin You said you wanted to run away But like a plastic bag in the wind your intentions began to fade Since the day you were wronged and raped Sometimes I can’t believe I remember your name… In that back pocket the turmoil seems to escalate Every prayer struggles to interpellate And the mountains seem to take you as a slave Why must the victim have the price to pay? Why must the victim have the price to pay? This town I still recognize But everything seems to change All the walls are closing in The reservoir is disappearing by the minute Your brief smile is all too familiar With exception to the snaggletooth There’s a snake in the grass I don’t understand who could set it loose… There is a petrifying feeling you can’t comprehend Overweening ambition that can’t ascend You praise but it all seems to amount to nothing In the end… Between feeling ignominious and knowing you didn’t deserve this You seem to underestimate what’s beyond this ignis fatuus I just want to scream, “Good God, it’s been too long, Are you the same or could it be I am different? In that back pocket the turmoil seems to escalate Every prayer struggles to interpellate And the mountains seem to take you as a slave Why must the victim have the price to pay? Why must the victim have the price to pay? Yesterday I walked through the abandoned amusement park Found pieces of the Rainbow scattered about in the remains Missed the same bus more than once realizing I can’t clear your name… "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (03-27-2003 02:32 AM).] |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Noah - you are writing with more depth than I've see you do before. Another of excellence... BC |
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Rdz9 Member
since 2003-03-16
Posts 142MT, USA |
I have no words to describe... this was just... above words. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Good Lord Noah - an entirely new edge here . . . the amusement park and the incident are amazing comparisons - like a soul lost? This is heartwrenching and sorry it had to be written but glad that you did . . . through pain we heal and I hope it helped - it touched my heart tonight . . . xxoo |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing Noah...James |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Wish I had the right words to say as your words touched me deeply. ((warm hugs)) Charisma |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Noah, a comparisson here that brought tears to my eyes and a pain to my heart. Lost and left in ruins was what I got from it. This was an outstanding piece of writing. Hugs for peace sweetie, Marti Few are those who see with their own eyes and feel with their own hearts. A.Einstein |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
outstanding work, my friend... always have enjoyed your writes and your views... Thanks for sharing, Regards, sudhir |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I completely agree with BC's response... you've always shown us excellence... but this reaches new levels... the depth and the maturity and compassion all contribute to an astounding whole... and the metaphor is wonderful! *S* |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Yesterday I walked through the abandoned amusement park Found pieces of the Rainbow scattered about in the remains Missed the same bus more than once realizing I can’t clear your name… Oh, dear Noah, this is an amazing piece of writing. Straight from your heart as usual. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...my favorite...so far. You always keep surprising! Eric |
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Hypnosis Member
since 2001-12-02
Posts 325CO |
I was in awe reading this Noah, just outstanding, I wish I could write in such a way that you can, since i was here at this site regularly last, i can see the great improvement in writing which i didnt know was possible because you wrote so beautifully before. I really like your new style. Your friend Randy Meador a life lived unexplored is a life not worth living. |
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