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the walls of Jericho
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the walls of Jericho |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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we brought the strangers into our midst - sanctuary despoiled crowded- there is no room left for a we you outside of me and me outside of you darkness between shooting pointed arrows does not work towards a united front neither standing stalwart and brandishing weapons shall we destroy or shore up this breach? watchers glare from atop the barricade shall we circle each other seven days and on the seventh seven times around? can we hear God’s prompting, his direction? shall we now shout? are voices alone enough to make the wall crumble? [This message has been edited by jellybeans (03-25-2003 06:49 PM).] |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Voices are powerful enough to do most anything if there are enough of them united. Great piece! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
wow. There is so much symbolism in here, and yet, it's so intensely personal, I don't think I'll even try an interpretation. But? As always, your emotion shines. As if you were talking right to me. (not a bad idea, by the way...  )love ya me sis. (you always strike some unusal images for me--and in this case? it's best I remain mysterious ) |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
This one, dear beans of jelly, is worthy of a second read....off I go!  Warm hugs, Peace, Love, & Light, EA |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
...Yep! Was well worth the second read! Hugs & stuff! EA |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I agree with Serenity ...I always come away from reading you with emotions stirred. Thanks M |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
It depends a lot on what those voices are saying. *S* But even the most conciliatory words won't help unless both hearts WANT the walls to crumble... otherwise, a slight tremor in the walls just supplies more rocks to throw. Wonderful work, lady... no one does metaphors better... no one grabs my heart more completely. (well... 'cept Toe... and I think he used superglue. *G*) |
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Thomas119gold Senior Member
since 2002-06-03
Posts 708Biloxi, MS (city by the sea) |
My first time reading one of your poems and it intrigues me. Thomas |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
well done my friend... even deserts have an oasis you know. enjoyed you talent here..but felt the pain in the words... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
I do enjoy your poetry. Glad to see you are posting. I like what Southern said, about more rocks to throw. But, you mentioning God, reminds me so much has to do with His will. I deeply believe that, no matter the circumstances... Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thank you all...I had not intended to write, but you know how cooperative muses can be... thank you *smile* I am blessed |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Wow, beautifully and sensitively done....wouldn't change a word of it. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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