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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2003-03-25 04:10 AM

Everything, but everything
I have chosen for repast
must be scraped from porcelain
by silver spoon before I dance.

Talks of gifts and gifts of chat,
fanning face with lacey weave
is just a sieve to hide the holes,
as the Irish define "net."

Structure of some nothingness--
lines perspect, deceivingly.
The tree of life is branches spread
as sky defines the all of me.

It took a dance of gravity--
to make me swear what I'd disowned.
The brittle that composes bone--
it is the top that bends in wind--
it could not hold the weight of need--
I felt the pounding on my skull.

If it were but just the fall
I think I could survive intact.
It was the branches scratching me
and my head upon impact
of every branch that gave concede,
allowing me my screech for stars
the very ones assisting reach
sustained upon me fatal flaw.

I bled to death, there in the roots.

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (03-25-2003 05:17 AM).]

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2003-03-25 07:43 AM

gravity...

some...

keep writing and I'll keep reading.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

2 posted 2003-03-25 04:26 PM

K - this one spoke to me today - usually they sing to me - but this - this one spoke:

If it were but just the fall
I think I could survive intact.
It was the branches scratching me

Amazing - just amazing xxoo

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2003-03-25 04:48 PM

Undertones of humanity
in soul's seek familia
too many hands
pruned the living tree...

no more the limbs
in reach of sky...

~*~

I do love it
when I am inspired
by YOU...

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2003-03-25 04:54 PM

This..this is extremely well done Karen..
I found myself saying in my head.."pull up Karen...reach up!"
Remarkable work..simply...remarkable.
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

5 posted 2003-03-25 05:14 PM

Just.....

Beautifully amazing!!

Heart Hugs,
Ethel

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

6 posted 2003-03-25 05:58 PM

smile...and blushing thank you's--

this was inspired by a quote from the Introduction to "Late Antiquity--A GUIDE TO THE POSTCLASSICAL WORLD":

"But an Irishman's definition of a net remains true: it is 'a lot of holes tied together with string.'"

For some reason? I really liked that.

thanks again.

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

7 posted 2003-03-25 06:27 PM

there is so much of you to read between the lines or is it that you write with so much left unsaid between the lines..hmmm

always a deep thinker (you are)
hugs
M

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

8 posted 2003-03-26 10:42 AM

I knew this one would be special from the title... and wasn't at all disappointed. *S* Your works have the pull of gravity... and sometimes falling into them hurts... but we willingly take the leap. *S*

Thomas119gold
Senior Member

since 2002-06-03

Posts 708
Biloxi, MS (city by the sea)

9 posted 2003-03-26 10:51 AM

You spellbound even the Rogue
That is why I must always stop and read your Poetry

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