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RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

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0 posted 2003-02-21 07:17 PM

Now gentle Love you guide us in your reign
which rules a night whose stars at last align
and tiers of passion mirror from it's pane

Parched, featureless lone landscape of the plain
when winds of oaths, rapt thunder, light entwine,
now gentle, Love you guide us in your rain

A past too often wasted, spent in vain
now forwards to a night where two combine
and tears of passion mirror from it's pain

Emotions run, wild horses through our veins
spent, flared nostrals I whinny near equine
now gentle Love, you guide us in your rein

Moon who moves the oceans, as this night wanes,
hope's passed to Sun with it's reflective shine
and tears of passion mirror from it's pane

As gods not of this earth two souls ordain
our share'd throne in throes of the devine,
now gentle Love you guide us in your reign
and tears of passion mirror from it's pain

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

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1 posted 2003-02-21 07:25 PM

Moon who moves the oceans, as this night wanes,
hope's passed to Sun with it's reflective shine
and tears of passion mirror from it's pane

As gods not of this earth two souls ordain
our share'd throne in throes of the devine,
now gentle Love you guide us in your reign
and tears of passion mirror from it's pain
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YES!! I was so hoping youd submit one of your cadeced kissed gem of pens. This is one classy write poet sir...rhyme divine.

"Trees are poems that the earth writes upon the sky ...
We fell them down to turn them into paper that we may record our emptiness."

K.Gibran

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2003-02-21 07:34 PM

RS... if this is what it took to get you to come back and share your words... bud..we may have to publish something more often..
I truly have misssed morning reads from you..

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2003-02-21 07:36 PM

You have been missed Richard..
This is an excellent one for the book.
~hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Martie

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California

4 posted 2003-02-21 07:47 PM

Richard--Some people always write poetry that is excellent..you are one.

Joyce Johnson

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Washington State

5 posted 2003-02-21 07:51 PM

Wonderful villanelle, Joyce

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

6 posted 2003-02-21 07:53 PM

Loved all of this one Richard, and it was an excellent choice for submission. This certainly is one of your best rhyming pieces.

~* Carpe' Diem *~

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

7 posted 2003-02-21 08:36 PM

I smile as I vote for this. It's a wonderful poem!

Mistletoe Angel

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Portland, Oregon

8 posted 2003-02-21 08:43 PM

(big hugggssssssss) Oh Richard, this is such a captivating villanelle, sweet friend, this brought tears to my eyes as praying to God always seems to do! (smiles) This is wonderful, sweet friend, kudos to you, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Richard, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

9 posted 2003-02-21 08:57 PM

RSWells
A difficult write, excellent you have my vote.

skyshine

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Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

10 posted 2003-02-21 09:41 PM

quote:
Emotions run, wild horses through our veins

This is a REALLY good description. Well done, Richard.

--Liz

It's not having what you want, it's wanting what you've got...
--Sheryl Crow

aries_luv_ppl
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since 2001-09-20

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Universal Mind

11 posted 2003-02-22 01:17 PM

hey I like the rhyme!

~Every girl has a dream within.

Earth Angel
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Realms of Light

12 posted 2003-02-22 01:30 PM

You, my dear Richard, are a master at writing villanelles! I doff my halo to you!!!

~ May the ink in your pen flow forevermore...

Warm hugs,
Linda

[This message has been edited by Earth Angel (02-22-2003 01:30 PM).]

Chanson
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since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

13 posted 2003-02-22 10:23 PM

There are so many wonderful
lines in here, each with their own
vision.
Much enjoyed. *s

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

Munda
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The Hague, The Netherlands

14 posted 2003-02-23 07:52 AM

An excellent and creative villanelle! Great job.

ellie LeJeune
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King of Prussia, PA USA

15 posted 2003-02-23 08:46 AM

Magnificent poetry! I am feeling honored to read such profound excellence. Ellie

A friend hears the song in my heart, and sings it to me when my memory fails.

regards2you
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California

16 posted 2003-02-24 09:18 AM

I love this! I can imagine flipping through a book of poetry and finding this. Oh, what a delight that would be. This is wonderful.

Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

hoot_owl_rn
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Glen Hope, PA USA

17 posted 2003-02-24 10:47 AM

Richard...love your formatting on this one...well done

Nan

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18 posted 2003-02-24 01:24 PM

You KNOW I love a good villanelle... and this is more than good...

Justbleu
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Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

19 posted 2003-02-24 02:06 PM

I really like this....I admire poets who are great at writing classic styles of poetry.

Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

20 posted 2003-02-24 03:17 PM

I would ask you to teach me...
but I know you're busy...

Enjoyed this very much, Richard...

thank you!

christian
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since 2002-12-18

Posts 331

21 posted 2003-02-24 03:23 PM

we need more poems like this, old fashioned
tradition and classy.

youve got my vote.

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26

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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

22 posted 2003-02-25 02:39 PM

Exceptional work....

regards,
sudhir

Denise

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23 posted 2003-02-25 10:41 PM

Excellent indeed! Well done, Richard!

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...

24 posted 2003-02-25 11:16 PM

Love this, Richard. EXTREMELY well done!
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

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Florida, USA

25 posted 2003-02-26 10:00 AM

Richard, not only should this be in the book, it should be in a book of classical poems, too....

Hugs,
Ethel

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

26 posted 2003-02-27 07:18 PM

I loved the meter the form and word play with rain, rein and reign...

you rock, richard.

SPIRIT
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California Desert

27 posted 2003-03-17 05:07 PM

This is way beyond good - gets my vote certainly

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

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East Lansing, MI USA

28 posted 2003-03-17 09:53 PM

ahhh. . . such a joy to read your work Sir. . . it would not be a book without your fine voice. . .

superb. . .

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