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Ode to my goddess
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Ode to my goddess |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia 
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In your eyes dwell the angelic hosts of heaven. Your hair cascades like the most majestic waterfalls as it falls to your shoulders Your body so perfect that Michaelangelo's sculpture pales in comparison Lips so lucious that your kiss could send a sinner's eyes toward heaven When you speak the heavenly creatures speak in one accord. Who can compare? Can I be so foolish to try to catch the eye of a goddess such as you. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
Oooh. I can't see any woman not melting like chocolate in the sun when she reads this one. Well done. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
thank you |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
This is just lovely - may she see you as you see her: love this line: your kiss could send a sinner's eyes toward heaven xxoo |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ah..the eyes of the smitten...lead to words that will certainly touch someone heart... nicely done Brad. very romantic.. |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
thank you very much |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
I like cpat's comment, 'the eyes of the smitten'... yep your smitten is showing and wonderfully written |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Its in the attitude. If you look at her as a goddess you will lose confidence. That is unless you see yourself as a god. No matter how beautiful she is she is just a woman... And either she will like you or not...James |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Brad, there are a few fallen goddesses who will love you forever (and perhaps smile upon you) for these words. I know I would (if I was fallen  )Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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