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me and her and her and him. (breakfast at Denny's)
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me and her and her and him. (breakfast at Denny's) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I would like some nice hashed browns toasted dark..yeah..just like that, I guess that's why they call 'em browns... But yeah, I like 'em--just like that... I would like a cheesey egg in scoop of strawberry preserved-- toast, cut into triangles (as if this might be a pop quiz) and coffee just this side of light before the sun's display. I'd like some milk-- served very cold-- 8 oz. measured just like gold in a tall thin glass no ice-- In fact, pretend? I ordered twice and bring me two just in case-- a shame to let good milk to waste... and yanno? those sausages? and pancakes that come with my meal? Bring them to that gentleman-- that one that's sitting here for free? and just a couple strawberries from the breakfast bar-- top it on some cake--whip-creamed-- and give him coffee, too, on me... (since, I know, refills are free...) and oh I sipped my java then, wishing for a cigarette... she asked me if that would be all. I said that I did not know yet. She smiled at me and shook her head. She told me: "He's here every night." She wrinkled nose with her distaste, nodding backwards to the right-- toward the bridge, beneath the ramp she told me that he'd set up camp coming here for the bathroom blessing her with his perfume on days she'd had to clean the "loo", sometimes she had to scrub bowl twice... I told her "just bring me the check" for I had lost my appetite-- "bring the food to him," I said, before I tipped her twice. * * * I wasn't hungry anymore. Desperation nauseates. It wasn't him. It wasn't her. But I was grateful for the door and clamped a butt b'tween my teeth as I walked across the street grateful for the imbetween of me and her and her and him. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Gawwwd I love your insight and rhymes divine baby...wanna hug ya for this one  The humilty of your rhymes touches this mothy heart o mine.   OH and ahem?? wheres me upDATE email?????  LOL (naggy nosey moths are the worst)  heh[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (03-17-2003 07:44 AM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I am fighting the urge to explain this one--and yer reply! egads woman... the tails I could tell... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Tales! yeah...that's what I meant... |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
When are you going to write the twisted book I'm already standing in line to buy the first |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done Ser... told in meter and rhyme with meaning and heart... not much better than this... enjoyed |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Well, for starters, your poem near drove me insane! Let me explain. Not only have I been spring-cleaning my home, but I have also been spring-cleaning the temple of my soul--my body! I have been detoxifying (no, I'm not an alky-holic!--mind you, with the given state of current affair, one could easily be driven to drink!) I am starving, and the fine, albeit fatty, food fare that you so VIVIDLY described, caused me to start drooling!--fortunately, my resolve is strong and I shall be "purified" in 20 hours, 15 minutes and 10 seconds. Time just flies when you're having fun! On a more serious note, your poem rings of many things---and not all of them are happy! You do not spoon feed the reader (as much as I would love for you to --especially the pancakes and sausages!). Very intriguing... On a literary level, this write rocks! Warm, springtime-cleaning hugs, EA |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What Raph said...  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
K - animosity towards humanity in general - this is what I felt - always leaving me in awe - and yes - TY very much - now I am starving . . . xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (03-17-2003 12:29 PM).] |
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Flower Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 240California |
Very interesting, I enjoyed. Love reading all these great writes. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
serenity...you are simply complicated ...with a big heart and the most amazing way with words. I want to give you a hug too! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
oh.... sigh.... I have no words let me just say...I understand course....when don't we, when we read each other? hugs to my mirror sister |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh this is marvelous and YOU? Gorgeous! Here's a hug from me too adding this to my library. luv ya Maree  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
oops adding now  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Karen, your tenderness and compassion that I felt through this is really touching. You write so amazingly of the real issues of life. I'm with Raph and Karilea....when's the book of your experiences coming out???Huh?? Heart Hugs, Serenity Ethel |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I thank you all much, and? I didn't really want to explain this one, but I think I should, just so that it's clear that my tone was/is intended as disgust--and no, not for the homeless gentleman, or the waitress, but for myself. This was about one of those "lightbulb" moments, when ya realize something about yourself you might not particularly like. I started out disgusted with the waitress, but the fact is, I was the worst culprit of snobbery there. I could have bought that man his own breakfast, and allowed him to retain some dignity, instead of high-handedly feeding him from my plate, as one would a dog. and about that waitress? Again, I was being awfully judgemental considering at that point in my life, I would not deign to scrub a toilet to earn a living. (Now I do that for free--grin--go figger...) So...just to clear things up (and ethel? you warm my heart by seeing the best in me, too) But no...I was just a snotty little girl back then. And thank you all much for letting me "show my warts" so to speak. Yep. I used to be a real bitch--now? I'm downright sweet in comparison. to forum. |
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