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Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

0 posted 2003-03-16 01:19 PM

*The melancholy tone of Duncan's poem
entitled, "popsicle sticks" reminded
of this one. It's a repost from a year
or so ago. Thanks Duncan!

The 14th Euphoria

Traffic noise, entering
through the cracked pane,
skims the damp windowsill
before spilling to the duvet
where he stirs.

Trolley exhaust, clinging
to the diaphanous curtain,
mingles with his faint musk
scenting the pillows.

Purrs of contentment
from well-bred calico cats
curled atop iron heating grates
echo the murmurs I drew
from his lips a few
hours before.

Aromas, steeping
from morning cups of tea, rising
from bowls of warmed wheat
arouse me while I await
his waking.

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

1 posted 2003-03-16 02:28 PM

Very nice chanson, vivid images take the reader right there

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2003-03-16 02:38 PM

Enjoyed...nice descriptive writing...James

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

3 posted 2003-03-16 03:04 PM

Aenimal
James,

Thank you sincerely.
I am happy for your visit!

*Big Smile*

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

4 posted 2003-03-16 04:54 PM

'Purrs of contentment
from well-bred calico cats
curled atop iron heating grates
echo the murmurs I drew
from his lips a few
hours before.

Aromas, steeping
from morning cups of tea, rising
from bowls of warmed wheat
arouse me while I await
his waking.'

I like what my 'melancholy tone' reminded you of. Love the city sounds to this and the easy Sunday afternoon feeling.
The title is subtlely fascinating. Any clues? I like the use of numbering, too.

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

5 posted 2003-03-16 05:16 PM

Thanks, Duncan! I'm happy the relaxed tone came through. *s

The title was derived from, or more to the point, *for* Valentine's Day a few years ago when I wrote it.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

6 posted 2003-03-16 07:22 PM

(big hugggssssss) It can feel like forever when you wait for that something to happen, sweet friend, I know this melancholy feeling and I thought I had it recently until I lost my sweetheart on New Years Day! (sad sigh) I send many hugs your way, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Dorene, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

7 posted 2003-03-16 07:31 PM

Thank you, Noah! and
~~Hugs~~ for your loss.

When you think you have heard it all,
listen more closely.
~Dorene

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