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Fade to black |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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something slips away, becoming silent as it pales, the rainbow, its once colorful fan, spreading out, brilliant, beneath the touch of sun, starting to retract, its strength siphoned out, pinks and purples scattered about, without direction, gone astray......... so heartless, and cruel, to lose control, of how it was supposed to be written, the ensuing truth and fairytale's end, becoming one of slow demise, but lacking the glory and grace to simply vanish into thin air, as recycled pastels for a setting sun, instead, becoming one of old paint, left to tarnish, running down the drain, into the stench of dark, littered sewers, or morphing with caked up puddles of mud, filled with tossed cigarettes, broken glass, broken dreams, not sustaining itself for a celebration of silver's 25, but leaving instead, in a resounding inevitable THUD [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (03-14-2003 11:16 PM).] |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Michele, Oh dear, this is so well written and soooo sad. Heart hugs to you, Love, Pat  PS, I like the line: "recycled pastels for a setting sun" among other imagery well expressed. ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
This one has great images. I love the ending, 'inevitable THUD'. Great lines. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Good God - this one I felt - excellent Michele - left to tarnish, running down the drain, into the stench of dark, littered sewers, excellent writing xxoo |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
inkedgoddess - a'hhhh, fade to black, memories, love this one... BC |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
So lyrical....this is such a lovely,poignant poem. Eric |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
This is so, beauitful! Thank you for sharing!  Read ^ there, because you are reading the wrong part! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
the ensuing truth and fairytale's end, becoming one of slow demise, but lacking the glory and grace to simply vanish into thin air, as recycled pastels for a setting sun, Michele~ The is very beautiful and so sad. Could read the resignation in every word. Your poetic voice is really something and I admire your ability to write with such straight forward grace. [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (03-15-2003 07:03 PM).] |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thank you, for the supportive comments |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Mish I loved this, you know i love the dark ones, but that you had to write this, well that just sucks, hope all's well |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
Another side of Michele surfaces. And how dark is the dark side....where does it take you? To special places? Tell us more! |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Nice, Michele Better'n nice, actually. |
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Albert J. Allie Senior Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 512Queens NY |
Loved it as I do all your work  I loved the comparisons here.... instead, becoming one of old paint, left to tarnish, running down the drain, into the stench of dark, littered sewers, or morphing with caked up puddles of mud, filled with tossed cigarettes, broken glass, broken dreams,  |
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