Open Poetry #25 |
Swan Song |
Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
You are the forbidden swan who has swum into my lake the waters of my life which once held waves of turmoil now remain still and calm in your presence as your wings glide on the water I feel you beauty touch my intermost being and wish for a love that can never be for you are the graceful swan so beautiful your form so perfect your movement on the water that at times I forget everything my problems worries and start to enter the water to swim to you then I see my reflection and retreat into the solitude of loneliness for you are too beautiful for me and if the most gallant swan is unworthy then what of me for I am just a lonely creature hiding in the darkness so scold me not for loving you from my shadow for it is all I can in a love never ment to be and where there is no tommorow. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Okay, here is what I think, first, great analogy, loved it as a matter of fact. Second, here is my thoughts and god knows there are plenty of us females out there that sport the hurt of a "pretty boy"...(I just know someone is going to get a bit ticked off here, but what the hell..)..give me that ugly, lonely, whatever and if he treats me right I am going to cherish him forever. Pretty boys tend to spend forever making sure they don't miss out on something better.....not that I am bitter or anything... (kiss) (I know you are down today) Susan [This message has been edited by Susan Caldwell (03-10-2003 04:52 PM).] |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Beautiful words...full of longing. Eric |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
thank you |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Beautiful poem. When you SEE the beauty you are well WORTH of it! Reach out! Margherita |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
SOOOOOO BOOOOOOTIFUL! Loved the way you use you words, so unique! Read ^ there, because you are reading the wrong part! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
enjoy the fantasy for whatever |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very nice in depth poetic ramble. Cleverly concieved thoughts. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Brad, you never know what she's going to think and feel about you if you don't make an effort. Sometimes the best looking people miss out on a lot because others think they don't have a chance, when in reality they may very well have more than a chance. So, just try. hugs, Ethel |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
thank you |
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