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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2003-02-16 04:14 PM

Farther Than Mexico

“Come back to me,”

the ancient sound of Dana’s voice,
tremulous and rich,
as rich as the chocolate of her eyes,
the sound of her
even smelled good,
if only in his memory…

Konrad’s truck made it to Nuevo Laredo,
but the rattling had begun back in Amarillo
and the blue smoke turned gray in San Angelo
then finally heaved a black sigh
when he pulled into the graveled pit
of a truck stop
and died.

Thinking that a truck stop
was as good a place
for any old truck to die,
Konrad hefted out his belongings,
took the title and registration
from the glove box,
and hoped his boots still had enough
sole

because the road was still long
between here, and the digs
where Dana should be.

Belize. Where shards of pottery
were as plentiful as broken hearts
scattered on February 15,
where the jungle runs tropical
and would make a stateside greenhouse
blush with its opulence,

where Dana was, on her knees,
pulling up buckets, cleaning up broken
homes,

cataloguing past families
and their histories.

Where Dana’s ancient voice still sang,

“Come back to me,”

and still her voice
rang clear in his mind,
the steamy silk of her still in his heart,
and he hoped more than he dared dream
to find her once again,
in a waterfall that they could make

their own.

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (02-16-2003 04:29 PM).]

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2003-02-16 04:24 PM

now..you have woven another dimension and a new tale...not at all dependent on the past...

nicely done... very nicely done

SPIRIT
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since 2002-12-29

Posts 1745
California Desert

2 posted 2003-02-16 04:28 PM

You write beautifully indeed.

I be me BUT who does me be?

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

3 posted 2003-02-16 04:35 PM

Thinking that a truck stop
was as good a place
for any old truck to die,
Konrad hefted out his belongings,
took the title and registration
from the glove box,
and hoped his boots still had enough
sole

because the road was still long
between here, and the digs
where Dana should be.

Belize. Where shards of pottery
were as plentiful as broken hearts
scattered on February 15,
where the jungle runs tropical
and would make a stateside greenhouse
blush with opulence,

where Dana was, on her knees,
pulling up buckets, cleaning up broken
homes,

cataloguing past families
and their histories.'

So we're going to get to meet Dana? I like the direction you're taking this, Kari. Stories for snowstorms...

Bet Mexico's a lot warmer, Konrad always was the smart one!

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2003-02-16 04:48 PM

Is it you?

WOW!! Okay...now that I think I have everyone straight in my mind...
Don't leave me waitin' and beggin' for more..
This is great Karilea..and I love the direction you've taken here.
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Albert J. Allie
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since 2003-02-13

Posts 512
Queens NY

5 posted 2003-02-16 06:00 PM

I so love your work! I do i do!

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2003-02-16 06:03 PM

Karilea--even having lost part of the story, I find the telling of this bit intriguing. You do this so well!

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

7 posted 2003-02-16 06:38 PM

Sunshine - I love this tale, wow, nicely done...

BC

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

8 posted 2003-02-16 06:53 PM

it's good to read you again my friend. . . and I see that you've only gotten better. . .

wonderful work. . . just beautiful. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Sunkissed
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 610

9 posted 2003-02-16 08:41 PM

You're stories are right up there with the captain's, Sunshine, and that's saying a lot.

Yes, I'm addicted too!

Sunkissed.

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

10 posted 2003-02-17 06:46 AM

You're a natural at this storytelling.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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Realms of Light

11 posted 2003-02-17 10:01 AM

This is my favorite photo of you to date! You look wonderful! You radiate sunshine!

You put the "teller" in story! Another fine example of your writing capabilities!

May your alterego shine down on you this day,
EA

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

12 posted 2003-02-17 10:03 AM

Belize. Where shards of pottery
were as plentiful as broken hearts
scattered on February 15,
where the jungle runs tropical
and would make a stateside greenhouse
blush with its opulence,

where Dana was, on her knees,
pulling up buckets, cleaning up broken
homes,

cataloguing past families
and their histories.

Where Dana’s ancient voice still sang,
==============================

ahhh now youve touched on one of my (many) *L* unrequited dreams....I always wanted to be a archeologist and play in the sand.
Love where your taking this...
so glad Konnie got over that migraine

The imagery and settting of this is perfect...
"Konrad’s truck made it to Nuevo Laredo,
but the rattling had begun back in Amarillo
and the blue smoke turned gray in San Angelo
then finally heaved a black sigh
when he pulled into the graveled pit
of a truck stop
and died"

very cool poetess of the sun

Ericc
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since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

13 posted 2003-02-17 10:22 AM

A story poeticly told.
Eric

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

14 posted 2003-02-17 10:25 AM

So beautiful, Karilea. I love these stories ya'll are doing....
More, please????
.
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(BTW, I love your new picture. Like Linda said, you can see the sunshine shining through it....)

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

kayjay
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since 2002-06-24

Posts 2015
Oregon

15 posted 2003-02-21 01:18 PM

Konrad’s truck made it to Nuevo Laredo,
but the rattling had begun back in Amarillo
and the blue smoke turned gray in San Angelo
then finally heaved a black sigh
when he pulled into the graveled pit
of a truck stop
and died.

As one who has nursed clunkers for years, this really strikes home. From other comments, this must be a part of a series? It is a beautiful story. Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

16 posted 2003-02-21 02:56 PM

Very nice Sunshine...James

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

17 posted 2004-05-12 01:37 AM

You're a wonderful story-teller Karilea.

Am enjoying these.

M xx

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colours, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

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