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Alicia Member
since 2002-03-22
Posts 279
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I could wrap wax sheets around every drafting doorway have pink-brick heat in an hour and soak the film grain gray of yesterday in it’s pools. Or I could scrape the sticker fix of bruises from the walls and watch them swell again watch the thick, sick coat peel and burn, feel every flaking layer shed then settle, taste the pain in seething piles yes and somehow I think I'd feel lighter because of it god, just Live with the risk,... because a single breath could lift an ash slow draw the memories from the scars (liquid devil through internal straws flesh red and knowing) straight to the brain in a heartbeat though - the alternative is backhanded abusive and sealing a choke hold damn on white stained pages of history it beats a feathered wing until it’s bare cold scraped and useless, so instead I suppose, there could be peeling could be the swelling and burning it through so that one day there could be seeing and breathing and dreaming, and me. |
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skyshine 
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
I liked reading this.  ~sky I'm in charge, and I say question authority! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
watch the thick, sick coat peel and burn, feel every flaking layer shed then settle, taste the pain in seething piles yes and somehow I think I'd feel lighter because of it god, just Live with the risk,... because a single breath could lift an ash Brilliant...had to smile at the title! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Wow, this is a wonderful poem of starting again and introspection, sweet friend, I too love the excellent title, it shows that there are many ways to feel alive again and find true joy within our grasp and hope! (kiss on cheek) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Alicia, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Alicia, Introspection can be toxic, enjoyed. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Most powerful, I like this. Sandra |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Alicia - first I've read of yours. Liked this very much... BC |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
All of it. But this: "because a single breath could lift an ash slow draw the memories from the scars (liquid devil through internal straws flesh red and knowing)" ~ "and me" this one, god, this one, A... esp the title, lol like my own poking poem... then you with your options lol (but not, also)... reading this over and over and over... exposes too much of me ( keep swallowing: literal and all metaphor combined). is it possible to be awed and yet feel that I get 'used' to your writing? How I expect something amazing each time... so it seems commonplace, that the above is here... yet read each and again, amazement reborn... and understanding, again and again... can one become raw from so much fascination, from so much discovery, from the constant pounding of 'yes'? How can it be that my hunger for you has grown... sigh I've said too much here.. it's all in letters, written already or to be... I ache for the box ~smile~ lol I just cursed and had to erase it (getting too comfortable here, forgetting where I am ~wink~) so: *curse* I know this over and over... wish you weren't feeling it now, wish you were curled and tingling with evening and the quiet of night, and the comfort that hush brings... that you were tired the way a child gets from a long, hard day of playing... how it feels to be swimming for hours and trampling in to the kitchen with your friends for dinner...child-like, daydreaming, smiling wide without knowing, feeling loved and sweet aching, that's how I want to know you're feeling... so I'll wish it on you, and wish you good night. I miss you, A. love. (how I don't even have to go back and edit it for spaces or clear wording. ~big smiles~) [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Cor (04-06-2002 10:15 PM).] |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
quote: ok Alicia, where do I start on this one?? your style reminds me so much of Plath and Sexton, and, to a degree, Margaret Atwood. . . so very real and close to the edge. . . every word just peals from your inner self. . . there's so much here. . .so much that not even a re-reading could find it all. . . this one's going in the library, so I can read it at least 3 or 4 more times. . . this needs to be read more. . . yes. . . very much so. . . well done my friend. . . Peace, always. . . ------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Unmistakingly you my friend, excellent! We are all just prisoners here of our own device ~ Hotel California, The Eagles |
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Alicia Member
since 2002-03-22
Posts 279 |
~Well look who finally showed up to thank you kind, kind people for reading and leaving what you have. It's been a while, but please know that what you've left is here with me. You've said some things that spin me circles,...thank you. Thank you, so much really. *Peace poets. and look who's hit 50, which is a little more than 14, and god have I found some treasures along the way today, was nice to spend some 'time' here finally. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
...so instead I suppose, there could be peeling could be the swelling and burning it through so that one day there could be seeing and breathing and dreaming, and me and what a beautiful site that would be, i've seen glimpses already |
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