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Mother May I
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Mother May I |
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RosePetal 
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida 
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Your miracle baby Is what you used to call me When you're heart was locked It was I who had the magic key You bragged to everyone about me I heard all the continuous buzz Then your love for me faded Just like a novelty does Mother may I Say what's on my mind? You may be my mother, but I resent you For depriving me of your time Your heart is a deadly weapon I'm the one you use it against My ballpoint pen and pad have been my only defense The mother I once knew Vanished long ago into thin air Or maybe I'm the invisible one In the way of your busy affairs Mother may I be honest for a minute? Over you, I'll no longer cry This is it, I'm finished How could you One day be so proud Then turn the other cheek Like I'm a stranger in the crowd? I'm hurt and it makes me mad but my future children will have The mother I wish I would've had Unlike you, a seed turned bad |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Joanna, I'm so sorry your mother ignores you so much, no girl like you should ever be left behind or defied like this and I hope someday she can have the heart to forgive and make it upo to you! (kisses) I know you are going to be a wonderful caring mother and you are going to make all your children so very happy, as I dream of being your hubby! (kiss on lips) This is so sad but wonderfully said, sweet friend, I love you! (hugs)  Love, Noah Eaton |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Joanna, this is a heartbreaking scene. I wish you didn't have the feelings and experience to write about such a horrible thing. I don't have my mother, haven't since I was ten. Don't give up. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Very well written, Joanna...and the bitterness came through in a very un-subtle manner..... but I am glad that your children are going to have a wonderful mom because of your experiences. ~lots of motherly huggggssss~copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Joanna, I can see you are hurting sweetie. Sometimes we do what we have to do and our children don't see it as being right or fair. Hopefully one day you and she will be close again...and if not, try not to be so hard on her. I know you are going to be the greatest mom because of your experiences. This must have really hurt you to write but I am sure it did help....right? Please don't be sad, I care, and I'm right here with comforting hugs for you. Email me anytime. Love ya! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Joanna, I am truly sorry for your heartache right now. This is well expressed and I hope that you find some healing in writing. Reading this has inspired me to write... Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
sorry to hear about this Joanna but I can also relate to this in a way with certain relatives. Take care  |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
 Joanna, a pukka piece of poetry. Great meter, flow, nice stanzas.... lovely write. You know I'm always here for you if you need to talk. I hope to see you on tommorrow. I've missed you this week!  ~ Titus "Tesous Christos, Theou Uios, Soter" |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
this i liked in common with all good poetry it works because it has something to say and says it well arthur |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Rosey Posy darling girl OH MY! Such an outstanding and wonderful piece of writing, it’s clear you have a lot of anger, and clear why you have it. No mother could ever I believe ask for a better daughter than you, and you are a wonderful and amazingly talented writer. Not only do you have something to say but you say it in a forceful and direct way that captivates and holds the attention. I utterly utterly love the way this is written darling girl. Absolutely perfect in flow and rhythm. The content is perfect too. You had something to say and you said it, I’d be proud to have you as a daughter I know. Hugs to you   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I am childless..but can give you a motherly hug when needed... ((Joanna)) M |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
RosePetal, Well done, this is something you should read again through out the years. Enjoyed |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Wow, Joanna this is so powerful. We learn from our parents mistakes, That is the only good thing that comes out of a situation like this. I know I did and I was a better parent because of it...great write dear girl and oh boy, your new picture is a knockout. floria Floria |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
you all are the best friends I could ever ask for ((((group hug)))) Thank each and every one of you for taking the time to read and comment! and a big special ((HUGGG)) to floria, i've missed you! |
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