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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2002-04-05 09:52 AM

before dawn
along mineral ridge
behind wolf lodge
the spirits of warriors
hunt the white tail
and wild turkeybefore dawn
along mineral ridge
behind wolf lodge
spirits of warriors
hunt white tail,
wild turkey

red eyes
of old one
searches darkness
tracking silent steps,
muledeer, bear
footprintless leads

pale skined
we follow
breathless we run
ghosts in night colors
between fur soldiers
that sleep standing

morning's eagle cry
circles sound
opens sky
daylight permitted
to be our guide
the old one

invisible now

©Dark (edited version thanks lady)

[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (04-05-2002 04:12 PM).]

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2002-04-05 09:54 AM

nicely told... as usual...

I do enjoy your style!

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2002-04-05 10:18 AM

DS

The spirits from the past become real with your words. A very interesting poem.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

3 posted 2002-04-05 10:32 AM

Cpat, thank you for the reviews, I appreciate them much

Martie, it is about a legend in Idaho the spirit warrior that leaves tracks, but never takes the game. Thank you for the read lady.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2002-04-05 10:51 AM

My editorial mind took out all of the articles, leaving the bare essentials behind...I know you do not ask for a critique, but if you someday did so...it makes an astounding read that much more breathless....thank you for this....

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

5 posted 2002-04-05 11:24 AM

Sunshine...would enjoy your prospective..
send it to me if you will
[email protected]?

thank you for your attention

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

6 posted 2002-04-05 01:40 PM

I do love your style, I would know your poems even if your name wasn't on them. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2002-04-05 08:55 PM

Enjoying it all the more...

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

8 posted 2002-04-05 09:03 PM

Wonderful...just wonderful..thank you for this one. Hugs.

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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