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Not Quite Dunn
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Not Quite Dunn |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Not Quite Dunn It was apparently barely audible unless you were listening with fingertips feeling a move of words as if blind, leaning your fingers a little closer to his lips just to hear better with your heart he heightened commonplace things and made concrete fly. He stood tall among the SRO crowd, middle aged women playing at adolescence again, sitting on floors with crossed legs, staring at ceilings as if a rock star had come in to awe them back to how they might some day be a star if they could just write! He gave the answer easily, as if pulling off his shoes and settling back into his Laz-E-Boy with a Sherry of thought, words of import slipping past most ears but pin-pricking mine into attention… you don’t write the poem… it writes you… until its birthed, bathed and powdered… it writes you defining who you are, until you blink in recognition realizing you are Not Quite Dunn. Inspired by Pulitzer Prize Winner Stephen Dunn, 2001 ©Karilea Rilling Jungel 4 April 2002 |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea You are inspired! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"You don't write the poem. It writes you." Sure seems this way Sunshine...James |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
YOU are amazing!! Love this! Hugs.  ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
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Wow...this is great...your work's getting more and more post modern... He stood tall among the SRO crowd, middle aged women playing at adolescence again, sitting on floors with crossed legs, staring at ceilings as if a rock star had come in to awe them back to how they might some day be a star if they could just write! Love that...my only criticism Kari..the two adverbs in the very first line: It was apparently barely audible unless... the two words ending in ly together are a bit awkward, personally I think 'apparently' is unnecessary for the poem... Hugs you  K[This message has been edited by Severn (04-04-2002 11:10 PM).] |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
your words make me come un-Dunn with their richness. Inspiration looks good on you, Sunshine |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I am never "dunn" writing, I ramble too much, but my words are a release...this is a keeper for me, so I may enjoy time and time agin these words... Lauren~ Step through the |
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