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Love Through Laced Glass
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Love Through Laced Glass |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Love Through Laced Glass Someone knocked… The stairs were not carpeted, the pattern her tapping feet made was as familiar as the cadence of her voice. Through the laced glass she saw a man silhouetted in slender strength looking, looking towards the red rock sunset which melted like crayons left in hot summer sun. She opened the door and heard his voice, tender from a dream she had forgotten, and saw his eyes smile brown and direct from skin like a rice paper map. She could feel the fingertip fragile touch to trace each line to its beginning in her glancing. Her frolicking hair was in her eyes, and she tucked loose strands, as if importance curled her identity into a wisp that flew into his space and made her feelings visible. His hands were big with calluses nestled into the curve of his palm as he drank coffee from her dear china cup. He looked at the worn glass, dusty with buried days, and a marble, colored like bright fish and a pickle jar of burnt orange sand she had set on the counter. He seemed to understand, and the sweetness that came toward her in the kitchen as the sun fell into time was as familiar as the pattern her tapping feet made on the stairs. _________ 3-00 |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Awwwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, your gorgeous words always paint with Crayola colors and buzzes with life and butterflies and flowers before our very eyes! (kiss on cheek) This whole love vision seemed just like it could be depicted on a stained glass window, sweet friend, this is wonderful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ 'heard his voice, tender from a dream she had forgotten' This line reminds me of someone~ Thank you~  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Martie~ You write with a gentle intensity that draws me in and sets the mood so clearly. It's all so good!! Very!!!! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
In one word, beautiful... regards, Martie, Sudhir |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"looking, looking towards the red rock sunset which melted like crayons left in hot summer sun." Ah, just breath-taking Martie. Too many exquisite phrases to copy .. the imagery is simply superb. I love how your words always make me "feel" ... at the same time as "see" the action taking place. You have an amazing talent. Best wishes, /Kit |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Interesting...your usual command of imagery shows through M... She opened the door and heard his voice, tender from a dream she had forgotten, and saw his eyes smile brown and direct from skin like a rice paper map. sigh...... A suggestion: how about making 'were not' into 'weren't' in the second line? It's a bit stiff as is... Hugs,  K |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is beautiful, so visually perfect. Sandra |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
wonderful imagery Martie...and you do set the scene so well for the reader we feel like we are there... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What the Captain said...this had a beautiful ghostly feel to it...not real at all, and very, very tenable all the same... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Lovely scene ms Martie enjoyed it so much |
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