Just a Kiss - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Christopher

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

0 posted 2002-04-01 05:16 PM

Just a Kiss
©2002 C.G. Ward

still, god -
one night and several years
of convergent evolution later,
I can taste the tone of your kiss
where it traced a path across
the surprise of my lips.

I’m laughing,
as I remember the hazel of a
true smile…
where your eyes asked permission
even as hands wandered
freely without the benefit of ‘yes.’
   oh I grin at the thought
that refusal could possibly
have formed inside my mind
after an evening spent dancing
around the idea of
       ‘just a kiss.’

then, the feel
of your thigh beneath my fingers,
as I caressed desire upon your skin
if only to feel the tremble-touch
   - and the heat of exhalations.
see, I told you this film was amazing…
     so,
why do I recall only your breath in my ear,
but nothing of the plot?

I was so bold then,
until my heart caught your gaze,
and it felled me - fascinated
at the simple way your veins played
over the smoothness of your hand,
     and stretched lightly
while soft fingers played my hopes.

it was there,
as we found time to brush lightly
         -pulse to pulse
across a veneer of platonic,
that I told you, yes, I told you –
‘there is no such creature,
                    as just a kiss'

you simply shook your head.

it wasn’t until later
as I readied to leave,
that you bent arms around me
in the scent of a promise,
and proved me right.

[This message has been edited by Christopher (04-01-2002 05:17 PM).]

Suetang
Member Ascendant

since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

1 posted 2002-04-01 05:20 PM

Hello Christopher

This was simply beautiful.

Take care.....Sue

Suetang

Victoria

Member Ascendant

since 2000-08-12

Posts 5869

2 posted 2002-04-01 05:24 PM

as we found time to brush lightly
-pulse to pulse
across a veneer of platonic,
that I told you, yes, I told you –
‘there is no such creature,
as just a kiss'

This is my all time favorite Chris..loved it..

~Victoria

"If music be the food of love, play on." (William Shakespeare)

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2002-04-01 05:25 PM

Wow...Chris!! Such a tender sensuality..beautifully done. I'm impressed!

Elizabeth Cor
Senior Member

since 2000-10-13

Posts 879
Over the river and through the woods

4 posted 2002-04-01 05:34 PM

stunned. unemotional reaction later (lol).

Is this biographical, and if so... the words don't hurt... and therefore, with this much meaning, and the passing of friend to more, and this aching but accepting sadness in myself... well that leads to the question: do I know who this is about?

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

5 posted 2002-04-01 05:34 PM

hey Kissy face,
I am keeping this one....I love it.
You do romantic very nicely

Elizabeth Cor
Senior Member

since 2000-10-13

Posts 879
Over the river and through the woods

6 posted 2002-04-01 05:44 PM

okay. I'm sure now lol.

sigh... I'm crying, you know it? Because of you... because of so much gained and lost in your life and this window into a time I've heard so little and so much about... this opens your life: in idea, and in the grace of honesty in a way that kills me.

I'm sorry. And I'm glad... and I wish...

One day, dammit, I'm going to see you living out memories without unrequited endings... & I'm going to look over then and smile smugly at you in your contentment and I'll point a proverbial finger at you with a meganface… “see?” it will say; and we’ll both grin and win at the “I told you so.”

I love you. I love you so much.

Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

7 posted 2002-04-01 06:18 PM

This is pretty

(LOL pretty, I know, but it IS)

You write this way, this voice, very well.

BOL
Nic

Elizabeth Cor
Senior Member

since 2000-10-13

Posts 879
Over the river and through the woods

8 posted 2002-04-01 06:24 PM

Pretty? I don’t know, Nic, I read a lot of angst in this…

Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

9 posted 2002-04-01 06:26 PM

Now that you mention it - you're right. I feel pretty...but also a lot of angst too.

Elizabeth Cor
Senior Member

since 2000-10-13

Posts 879
Over the river and through the woods

10 posted 2002-04-01 06:27 PM

Yeah. He must be pregnant.

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

11 posted 2002-04-01 07:33 PM

a baby Christopher?!

The world is not ready!

I think this one's excellent, Chris. I don't see the angst but perhaps a small twinge of regret over a memory willingly kept alive. Of such things poems are penned....as you have done so expertly.

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

12 posted 2002-04-01 08:30 PM

See what a kiss can do

lovely poem.

Aimster
Member Elite

since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

13 posted 2002-04-01 08:56 PM

Chris,

beautiful poetry, and wow that
must have been some kiss! this is
amazing imagery, and i really felt
the remorse and pain...wonderful
write!

take care.
amy

"you can't stop
the rain
from pouring down
can't stop the
world from turning 'round
can't stop me from
loving you
no matter
what you do"

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

14 posted 2002-04-01 08:58 PM

Christopher...my my..this is so soft and sensually written...and oh, the memories of my own you pulled from the dark corners of my mind. Love this..sure do! And, I'm keeping this one! Excellent! Hugs.

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Poet deVine

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

15 posted 2002-04-01 09:30 PM

Beautiful...and stunningly romantic. I love this...to be kissed like this would be magic.

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

16 posted 2002-04-02 07:23 AM

Liking the tone, liking the word-usage (excellent control of adjectives here hon - seriously)

'veneer of platonic' - way cool...can I steal that please?

Like I said, it's soft...romantic, but has that fine-writing edge that saves it from mush and yawny romance..

I do wonder if perhaps some of your indentations aren't distracting...maybe that's just my tired eyes...but, I really don't like that comma after that little word 'so'...all by itself...

'see, I told you this film was amazing…
so,
why do I recall only your breath in my ear,'

it's just - over...just too crowding lol

Well done, awesome poetry you..

K

p.s..absolutely stunned at the departure from blue eyes

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

17 posted 2002-04-02 10:55 PM

Amazing piece. Took me back to a kiss I remember and have tried writing about..but to no avail as my words cannot do it justice. Yours do great justice to the feeling of emotion and passion in that first kiss.
Sorry though, gotta disagree with Severn…I thought the way the word “so” was placed, was exactly right, as it gave a pause that would be expected in the conversational tone of the thought.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

18 posted 2002-04-02 11:24 PM

Excellent...James

Christopher

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

19 posted 2002-04-05 12:54 PM

Sue - I take whatever I can get! *smile* Thank you for being the first to comment.
Victoria - All-time fave? Wow, honored. Thanks you for smiling by.
Martie - Your words of appreciation mean much.
Corrine - There is no such creature as an 'unemotional reaction' from you Meegan. And yes, you SRAD.

Susan - I'm not sure which is worse - me thinking you're mad at me by calling me Christopher, or getting excited by you talking about kissing!

Thank you for your comments ma'am.
Ocean Princess - Thank you for the follow-up reply, its sincerity and warmth is... refreshing, and you're likely right... though i doubt you'll be saying it quite that nicely... you'll rub it in much less delicately.

*hugs*
Nikki - Pretty. Pretty. Pretty. Ahem. Thank, I GUESS! (BOL)

Cor - Go away.
Nic - Go away.
Cor - Dream on. heh
Bal - No, the world is not ready, but then again, would it ever be? heh Thanks for your kind words.
Walker - or what a lovely poem can do to a kiss. Thank you.
Amy - The imagination can provide some amazing material on the subject of a kiss, though there are several in the past that helped form it. Thank you.
Enchantress - THank you for your heart-felt response.
Sharon - I was thinking about you when i wrote it.

Thank you kind lady.
K-eem-lah - Thank you for the bulk of the reply, and the mild criticism. I disagree though, because that's exactly what i wanted - a kind of stumbling, shy reaction to something that "I" had never quite felt before. And to tell the truth, i really talk like that, lol. As to the lack of blue eyes - it was my way of keeping it from seeiming completely perfect. HUGS
Tracey - Thank you first for your comments, second for your association, and thirdly for your agreeance. Perhaps someday you'll get that kiss out on paper.
James - Danke.

Chris

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

20 posted 2002-04-05 11:13 PM

rolf....I will have to stick with "Kissy Face" for now

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

21 posted 2002-04-06 12:16 PM

I meant the comma after the so...not the so...and yes C I know the intent, I merely mean...fine tune the indents to express the intent more clearly..

so there

Not K-eem-lah

[This message has been edited by Severn (04-06-2002 12:20 AM).]

Ivy Rose
Senior Member

since 2001-12-29

Posts 1300
MA, USA

22 posted 2002-04-06 12:30 PM

Chris...This is poetry at its best. Every line a gentle nuance into the next. GORGEOUS POEM!!! ***Ivy Rose

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

23 posted 2002-04-06 12:35 PM

how I have heard this before..just a kiss..protective mechanism I would say today..romanctic nuances are well brought out in this one Christopher!

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.