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Into the Loss
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Into the Loss |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Into the Loss I watch the last cluttered thought absorb the light turn to spider web hide hide behind the diligent dust Distance drains the minutes across the gray sky into the curving line where tall buildings eat people their glass eyes closed waiting for morning So quick the cuddled moments lost to the barefoot touch of cold cement and the opera of the air with vibrato fills the entire empty until knees touch and ignite the dark wood with polish Fill me with honey I am dry and my warm leaks out the window of the day into the curve of night up up into the loss |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Not every poet can be understood...I am grateful I know your every word, and hopefully every meaning behind them... |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
And I am sure you were indeed filled with the honey you so desired Martie, oh but this felt like I was standing right beside you. (if I were you'd have been hugged) Live today like it was your last day on earth! |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
quote: fabulous imagery, great alliteration quote: personification & metaphor at its best quote: again, great alliteration and "until knees touch/and ignite the dark wood with polish" is a line that is just so incredibly perfect .... it was like my bare feet got cold and slid across the page with your words quote: i love how you are using the language in a unique way... instead of saying "i am dry and my warmth leaks"... you say "my warm leaks"... it's exquisite in that, as the reader, i am taken into the absolute of "warm" rather than "warmth".. it's hard to explain... I like it very much when parts of speech are used in ways which take the reader to a new level of feeling, rather than just thinking... "into the curve of night" is also a really terrific image which is infinite, almost, continuous ... it arcs.... and flows "up up/ into the loss"...... sad, so sad... but so full and rich with the value of it all excellent work, Ms. Poet!!!! i admire you. [This message has been edited by doreen peri (02-17-2002 07:52 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Fill me with honey I am dry and my warm leaks out the window of the day into the curve of night up up into the loss ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Loving it Martie...sitting here smiling and just loving this! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--I know you understand. Sharon--Thank you for being here and for the hug. doreen--I am so pleased with such an indepth look at my words...you just are so good at knowing..that's why I relate to what you write so well. Thank you, poet!! Nancy--Thank you for you love and magic! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
So quick the cuddled moments lost to the barefoot touch of cold cement and the opera of the air with vibrato fills the entire empty until knees touch and ignite the dark wood with polish Fill me with honey I am dry and my warm leaks out the window of the day into the curve of night up up into the loss ========================= allow me to ditto Dor's poetic observations...and then add.... this is a perfect example of why I come to read you with bells on.... for the things I will see and feel.... and for the things I will learn... BECAUSE? I want to write like this when I grow up.  "Our scientific power has outrun our spiritual power. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Martie...can I just agree with everyone else and say that I am always in awe of your imagery... |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Martie,you have such a unique way of writing, wonderful words put together. floria Floria |
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JBaker515
since 2001-02-28
Posts 458Dartmouth College |
MARTIE...same here, everything has been said, so just read everyone elses, and that is what i think!! MARVELOUS! |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
What beautiful imagery, Martie... I loved this Distance drains the minutes across the gray sky into the curving line where tall buildings eat people their glass eyes closed waiting for morning Beautiful, profound thoughts! copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is sooooooo gorgeous, sweet friend, your words are always as sweet as honey as pure with such emotion and voice! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is breathtaking! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
Martiesque at its best. Your mind must be a wonder to behold fair poet to be able to pen as you do. (not quite sure what I just said, other than I so do enjoy your poetry of which I am more than a wee bit envious) |
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