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Dr.Moose1
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0 posted 2002-03-26 07:35 PM


Cold flow such thoughts from armored steel
embattled, will they never yeild?
Emotions, to dull finish ground,
embraced, can no surcease be found?

Might gross distorted image fly,
no more offend my sight , that I
alone, may cause it to disperse,
at last be rid of this dread curse?

To know of warmth, yet feel no heat.
Mechanics of a cold heart beat
within, lies chest-deep locked away,
that which I might become someday.

To mold a key, to spring the lock
in irony, against the clock
which mocks my moves of leaden hands
deluding me, I understand.

Detachment, which has built these walls
which thouroughly encompass all
such feelings, would these words suffice
to penetrate my own device?


© Copyright 2002 William E.Kleist - All Rights Reserved
Larry C
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1 posted 2002-03-26 08:39 PM


Doc,
Awesome write. I imagine you are done with that key by now!

Everybody thinks of changing humanity and nobody thinks of changing himself. Leo Tolstoy

Mistletoe Angel
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2 posted 2002-03-26 08:40 PM




(sigh) Wow, I always love the wonderful thoughts you weave in your words, sweet friend, this is a wonderful ramble! (big hugggssssss) You are a delight to us all, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet William, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Martie
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3 posted 2002-03-26 08:48 PM


Doc

There is certainly, yes, a reason for you to continue writing..This is so well done.  I wish I could write this way...so well thought out in intent and flow.  Excellent!

Dr.Moose1
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4 posted 2002-03-27 07:56 PM


Larry C,
Thank you my friend. Yes I suppose I am.I've always enjoyed paradox (to me) it smacks of the ultimate form of humor.Thanks again.
Doc
Noah,
Thank you. I suppose I do ramble on at times, however this was not my intent.
Were I to analyze this piece if someone else had written it, I would say the writer has issues with self-worth (don't we all?),and may possibly have been institutionalized at one time or another, but then, who's to say?
Doc
Martie,
You are a treasure PIP is lucky to have.
While you may not realize it, I am trying my darndest to use more descriptive phrasing in the works that I post. Your vivid imagery
is an inspiration. The grass is always greener, but were it not for you,
I do not think, could put to ink, that certain color blue.
Doc

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