Open Poetry #19 |
Four ifs |
Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Four ifs (a just because it’s Monday poem) If I could hear only one voice today I’d wish it were yours If I never write another love poem that’s ok the last one will always be for you If I could change my mind go back and rewrite the day I wouldn’t If it were mine to be anywhere I’d simply be with you |
||
© Copyright 2002 Duncan - All Rights Reserved | |||
SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"If it were mine to be anywhere I’d simply be with you" damn if that isn't completely romantic.... *sigh* Cowboy, your words never fail to make my eyes sting, and my lips smile |
||
Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I love the sweet and innocent romance in this poem, Duncan. copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
||
Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Duncan, Somebody stop him...he's smokin'! Way cool. I'm getting jealous of your style here sir. Excellent job. |
||
rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Duncan, Awwwwwww... gawd I loveeeeeee your work. Hugs Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
||
amigo Senior Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 520the earth school |
If it were mine to be anywhere I’d simply be with you ------------------------------------ beautiful, Duncan....made my Monday....even if it's meant for someone else, the words are simply fab...thank you... |
||
walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Simply outstanding. |
||
Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
*sigh* If I could be left speechless It could only be by you To make me smile on Monday As only you can do Okay, so it’s early, this is a lame attempt at a poetic response!! erfkad If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
||
Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very romantic..and presented with simple hoest expression... nice work here.. I enjoyed! |
||
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
If I never write another love poem that's ok the last one will always be for you ================================== Ya know...you write quite a sweet poem from the porch Hey D ... have I mentioned how well you wear your heart on your sleeve? mothyme Of all the things in me I could never be, |
||
catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Nice thoughts on a Monday morning. Happy week. Sandra |
||
Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Duncan~ this is just so romantic and beautiful! *sighs*...wonderful write m'friend!! take care. amy |
||
Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Duncan darling boy this is as all yours are utterly utterly beautiful. :: This makes me smile for the sentiment and sigh over the words exquisite writing Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
||
Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I do like these 4 ifs....because I think they are a pretty good selection of what I would want too....Nicely done Duncan! |
||
Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
ACKKK!! Get out of my head will ya? LOL! You're always writing the stuff I'm feeling. I love this, Sir. How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so. |
||
A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
Gosh...those last lines say it all. Absolutely stunning.... ever deep...runs |
||
Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
A lovely, lovely lovepoem, clever as usual. But.... If you had a mailbox I'd sent you a note to give you this message and here I will quote: CHECK THIS OUT!!! you've become a fosterparent /pip/Forum58/HTML/002810.html Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
||
Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Gawd, I love the way you write!!!!! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
||
Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
you don't write like you're 4F! smoothly done, good sir |
||
Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Duncan~ Nice work, lovely thoughts! Lauren~ Greeneyes~ |
||
Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) This is so sweet and sensitive, sweet friend, I know she will always be so happy to love you forever and this truly will never be your last poem you write to her! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is superb! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Duncan, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
||
Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
If I could write If I could sing If I could dance If I could ring your phone I would to tell you privately what a sweet poet you are. But I can't write, sing, or dance and your number is unlisted so I'll have to shout this to the world... Duncan, you are one cool cowboy. |
||
BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You're sweet, I'm sure she loved this. (I apologize for sticking my nose in where it didn't belong, no hard feelings I hope) |
||
CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Duncan, sighhhhhhh what can I say but that I bearry much enjoyed reading your poem... Hugs2uPoetFriend *~coco~* |
||
suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
These are beautiful thoughts for any day of the week, Duncan. *S* I know they warmed this Thursday heart. *S* |
||
⇧ top of page ⇧ | ||
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. |