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Siofra

Senior Member

since 2000-09-28

Posts 551
State of Suspended Passion

0 posted 2002-03-23 03:35 PM

drink from me the sadness that sends my soul
stirring and drifting along seas unsoft
in their knock upon the sands of my patience.
I am a rocking boat
tilting and swaying to every loud scream of wind
that draws its hand in slap across the face of my will
and I am no longer strong enough to carry the passenger of pain I accepted.

you sit in awe
and what you think is creatitivy
is really my soul turned up
like stereo volume with a good system for sorting through then noise rubble.
can I no longer be soft?
can I have back my frowns and brooding?

I'm not your bad girl
I'm the soft one
remember?
this is the me created for the softness you craved
and we're all mixing again
and what you think is creativity
is sometimes truth with a devilish tongue
licking at your perfect image of me.
I'm tired of seperating myselves
when I'm just one woman
with an abundance of simple complications.
I'm coming down from your pedestals
slipping
bruising my knees as my hands connect
with only empty branches of air.

am a rocking boat
tilting and swaying to every loud scream of wind
that draws its hand in slap across the face of my will
and I am no longer strong enough to carry the passenger of pain I accepted.

"My ears have not yet drunk a hundred words
Of that tongue’s uttering, yet I know the sound:" "Romeo and Juliet"

Ivy Rose
Senior Member

since 2001-12-29

Posts 1300
MA, USA

1 posted 2002-03-23 03:39 PM

Siofra...EXTREMELY BEAUTIFUL AND PASSIONATE!!! This poem exudes the heady aroma of a woman of strength and passion.

***Ivy Rose

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2002-03-23 03:42 PM

BRAVO!!! Yes, I love it, I love it, such grace and passion fills your words, yes, always believe in yourself for you are a true warrior and never let the aches affect you! (smiles) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Siofra, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2002-03-23 06:38 PM

"I'm tired of seperating myselves
when I'm just one woman
with an abundance of simple complications.
I'm coming down from your pedestals
slipping
bruising my knees as my hands connect
with only empty branches of air. "

Very well said, Siofra. A heartfelt cry to be accepted as you are, with all the normal 'complications' of a multi-faceted human.

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

4 posted 2002-03-23 11:14 PM

A very compelling piece Siofra.

I'm coming down from your pedestals
slipping
bruising my knees as my hands connect
with only empty branches of air.

This part reminds me of what I once said to someone “take me off that damn pedestal, cause it hurts so much each time I fall off”. Yep, I know where you’re coming from with this.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Aimster
Member Elite

since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

5 posted 2002-03-24 10:07 PM

wow...how i think a lot of us
here could relate to this piece...
this is such a stirring, if i may
use that word poem...very intense
and powerful! i really loved it...
keep up the great work.

take care.
amy

"you can't stop
the rain
from pouring down
can't stop the
world from turning 'round
can't stop me from
loving you
no matter
what you do

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2002-03-25 04:18 PM

when the boat is taking on water. . . do we keep going??

hmm. . . I find that there's more here then I think. . . and that makes it an excellent poem. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Soleil Noir
Senior Member

since 2001-12-19

Posts 688
USA

7 posted 2002-03-25 04:23 PM

This is extremely well done...
thank you!

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

8 posted 2002-03-25 04:36 PM

Make that passenger walk the plank

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

9 posted 2002-09-27 01:10 AM

I can feel the ache in this,
and the hope for such
to end.

Moonlight Romeo

Senior Member

since 2001-09-10

Posts 982
The heart of you

10 posted 2002-09-30 09:18 AM

This ache knows its end in arms of love.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

11 posted 2002-12-19 01:20 PM

Such strength. I love it.

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