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amusemi
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1262
A State of Disarray

0 posted 2002-02-17 11:06 AM

This is a chant poem, written for presentation.  Two people read...one in foreground, the other in shadow.  It was inspired long ago when I saw it done in a coffee house in Seattle.  The two are meant to be able to be separated and could stand on their own.

Explain the alabaster wind
With crying memories.
                                        (charred and torn)
Fill a mind
In paraphrased fantasies.
                                        (fragmented papyrus)
Show the mermaid
In the waterfall.
                                        (returned to mankind)
Create a miracle
From the vacuity of life.
                                        (remnants of Alexandria)
Chill the bones
With weight of thought.
                                        (grain of memory)
Examine tragedies
With beauty and blessings.
                                        (pearl of thought)
Fly in mud
Of ebony blue.
                                        (all knowledge)
Capture a rose
With rope and cage.
                                        (all wisdom)
Paint the rainbow
In shades of gray.
                                        (bestowed in faith)
Wish a metaphor
A goodnight's sleep.

Listen to the muse...

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

1 posted 2002-02-17 11:21 AM

Excellent!!! What a talent, what a skill.

They stand alone well and are more than the sum of the parts together. I'm thinking that is certainly the goal of such a device. Enjoyed the read!!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

EagleOne
Member Elite

since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

2 posted 2002-02-18 03:59 AM

I enjoyed this, I'd love to see this one at a reading. Well done!

We are all just prisoners here of our own device ~ Hotel California, The Eagles

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2002-02-18 03:43 PM

As I read this I could hear the two voices.
And you are so right, each could stand on their own.
Outstanding poetry Amusemi!!

mirror man
Senior Member

since 2001-01-08

Posts 814

4 posted 2002-02-18 04:01 PM

I like this, very intersting form. Alot said. Very good.

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

5 posted 2002-02-18 04:37 PM

Loved this, Amusemi, beautifully done...

*smiles*

~Tier

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