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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2002-02-17 10:19 AM

And I see you laying there
A memory of a forgotten
Time, a place of heart
When life had simple
Meaning
The wind breezes through
The trees, an endless calling
On a silent night;
Even the stars somehow
Have lost their shine
Among heavy clouds
That wisp by so softly

On the distant horizon
A storm approaching
Reminding me how
Life can be, how it is
The pavement seems parched,
Waiting for rebirth,
That smell of heat
Rising
In summer rain

The wood carving is left;
By some forgotten roadside
Weathered and older,
The flowers dangled and dying
Brushed off each month
For memories
Of a happier time

The words faded,
Black upon the stone
Of your life now,
The heading which
Once read beloved
Friend, beloved…is sketched
Still along my heart,
The trace of my heart,
The trace of my life,
My whys for remembrance,
But the whys don’t
Give the answer I seek

I feel lost in my dreams
Lost with out you
Wanting
So much in my selfish need
I go there, when I need to feel,
When I need to cry,
When I need to remember,
The pure embers of your grace
Scattered now amidst
The being you once knew

I should hate the rain for taking you
For leaving me here
To walk my days;
To live my nights in solitude
With out the touch
Of your embrace

But, I have forgiven nature
I have looked beyond
The face of death
Knowing somewhere
In the memory
Of our time

Peace waits

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows
of my heart

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (02-17-2002 10:19 AM).]

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2002-02-17 10:27 AM

Lauren.... you are making me cry this morning....I'm keeping this one

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

2 posted 2002-02-17 10:31 AM

enjoyed ver much

one of your best

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

3 posted 2002-02-17 10:35 AM

*sigh* the rain in your heart touches mine...My heart goes out to you as tears flow freely....**big big hugs**

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Silver Streak
Member Elite

since 2002-01-02

Posts 3625
FL, USA

4 posted 2002-02-17 10:37 AM

Lauren, Ah! your pen is the pen of an angel. Your words are honey to my soul. Thank you.
((Lauren))
-newell

Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com

Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

Marsha

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

5 posted 2002-02-17 11:06 AM

Lauren darling girl Oh WOW when YOU write you really write, this is utterly utterly fabulous.

Absolutely perfect poetry

Such an outstanding and wonderful piece of writing, I’ve read fabulous pieces from you before this is simply stunning. Truly you’ve outdone yourself darling girl. I could sip from the honey of your words endlessly, you are a delight and a joy

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

6 posted 2002-02-17 11:16 AM

I feel lost in my dreams
Lost with out you
Wanting
So much in my selfish need
I go there, when I need to feel,
When I need to cry,
When I need to remember,
The pure embers of your grace
Scattered now amidst
The being you once knew

I should hate the rain for taking you
For leaving me here
To walk my days;
To live my nights in solitude
With out the touch
Of your embrace

But, I have forgiven nature
I have looked beyond
The face of death
Knowing somewhere
In the memory
Of our time

Peace waits

=====================================

the peace lies within thy pen as well, dear poetess of grace and trace ...
this touches and stirs the echos of places deep. exquisite write of release and the discoveries of healing that come with both time and learning the heart lesson of "holding on while letting go"

"Our scientific power has outrun our spiritual power.
We have guided missiles and misguided men."

MLK

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

7 posted 2002-02-17 11:16 AM

Lauren,
You pen the storms of the heart so well! Wonderful reflective poem.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

8 posted 2002-02-17 11:29 AM

(big hugggsssssssss) Oh Lauren, this is so so sad, my heart cries out to you but this is also a hopeful poem and I just know that he rain will fall and wash those tears away and you will find peace and harmony when the sun comes out in your heart as you love yourself happly! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, our thoughts are with you! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

9 posted 2002-02-17 11:41 AM

Ah Lauren, I love the way you have penned this. Absolutely beautiful, and enjoyed so much!
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me~

Auguste

Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

10 posted 2002-02-17 12:06 PM

You describe grief in such a way that anyone can understand your pain, Lauren. Very well written, my friend. *hugs*

Michael

Michael Auguste~
There is more depth to the heart than the mind can comprehend and it only has boundaries when we choose to fence it in.

rebekah33
Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 140
MD/NJ

11 posted 2002-02-17 02:24 PM

What a wonderful piece! So moving, plus the desciptions made me feel like I was sitting outside on the brink of a rainstorm in August. Great job!
-R.

"So stop and love and dance and live and laugh until you cry" Edwin McCain

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

12 posted 2002-02-17 02:52 PM

Enjoyed your words...James

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

13 posted 2002-02-17 11:48 PM

This is unbelievably sad, Lauren...

The pain reaches out and touches me from between the words....

The words faded,
Black upon the stone
Of your life now,
The heading which
Once read beloved
Friend, beloved…is sketched
Still along my heart,
The trace of my heart,
The trace of my life,

It is soul wrenching and so well written, but I hope that it isn't personal.
((hugggsss))

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

strbbux
Member Elite

since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

14 posted 2002-02-18 09:34 AM

This is so bittersweet Lauren,
"Even the stars somehow
Have lost their shine" It shows much sorrow, yet much love, this is truly magnificent. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

15 posted 2002-02-18 11:40 AM

Beautiful reflections of your heart Lauren....you tug this morning....heart hugs dear friend.

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

16 posted 2002-02-19 10:02 AM

Forgiveness is a FINE virtue

and a healing one!

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

17 posted 2002-02-19 10:52 AM

Greeneyes - again I am at a loss for words to write about how I like your poetry. You are very talented...

BC

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

18 posted 2002-02-19 10:53 AM

Greeneyes - again I am at a loss for words to write about how I like your poetry. You are very talented...

BC

Kathleen
Junior Member

since 2002-02-19

Posts 20
Indiana

19 posted 2002-02-19 11:53 AM

Lauren, you always bear your heart and soul and this is no exception. There's just something so real about your poetry, and I feel I still have a ways to go but I'm so much better for having read your words. Thank you

Kathleen
(Irish Rose)
"My God is an awesome God"

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

20 posted 2002-02-19 03:51 PM

and when peace is found
then, and only then
shall the heart be at rest
and the soul be in eternity. . .

you know, you reach more amazing depths every day. . . and I find myself going along for the ride. . .

excellently done. . . in form and in content. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

21 posted 2002-03-09 09:14 PM

Lauren,
I go there, when I need to feel,
When I need to cry,
When I need to remember,
The pure embers of your grace
Scattered now amidst
The being you once knew

This needs a:

*BUMP*

Everybody thinks of changing humanity and nobody thinks of changing himself. Leo Tolstoy

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

22 posted 2002-03-09 09:17 PM

Keeper for me, lovely written.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

23 posted 2002-03-09 09:29 PM

Laauren, (Thanx to Larry C)....I have gotten
a chance to read this beautiful but sad and
longing poem....You have expressed an earth
full of feelings here...

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