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the day of the rain
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the day of the rain |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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She was looking forward to Sunday and its solitude, but she woke instead to a steady drizzle. She pulled out a Kleenex and frowned. How hadn’t she seen this coming? She should have remembered to listen, her intuition could predict the weather…she tuned in …oh, an unexpected warm front had moved in and collided with the long standing cold front. That explained it. Not one to revel in the rain, she retreated to take notes as each region was mapped out they were clearly defined. The cold had hung around so long it was written in stone; the warm, however, was new, and hypnotically bright. But the space that was right overhead where the two fronts intersected and all the lines became fuzzy, was the point at which rain was inevitable. She watched, almost alienated, as the one tried to fight off the other and cheered when the effects of the warm were winning, although it was raining, she found herself smiling. Her heart was dripping and full of the aroma of washed clean by the rain. But as cold is want to do, when the sun started to set, and the warmth retreated, it took advantage of the increasing distance of the light. She edged closer to the fire and shivered, despite. She needn’t touch her hand to her heart to know that the forecaster was advising more rain, later turning to snow. [This message has been edited by jellybeans (03-18-2002 02:35 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Jellybeans, A warm and friendly write, enjoyed. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
She watched, almost alienated, as the one tried to fight off the other and cheered when the effects of the warm were winning, although it was raining, she found herself smiling. Her heart was dripping and full of the aroma of washed clean by the rain. This theme has been running through my mind for days, was just talking about it! Excellent, write...I very much enjoyed. |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Ah yes... weather... gotta love it, eh?  I am a rabid horse. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
well, lol, guess this one missed its mark, its not about the weather, its about my heart.....am glad you read it as smiles though, it was written in a bit of depression  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The cold had hung around so long it was written in stone; the warm, however, was new, and hypnotically bright. ----------------- when the effects of the warm were winning, although it was raining, she found herself smiling. Her heart was dripping and full of the aroma of washed clean by the rain. The cold will not always win, lady... though it seems relentless in its determination to dampen spirits and freeze hope... spring will someday come for more than an hour. *S* Or so we'll hope. *S* This is excellent... and ordinarily I'd be complimenting your work... but I'm busy smirking about the dual poem issue... you know the one, Miss Metaphor? LOL |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
the weather of the heart. . . or, the heart of the weather. . .or, whether the heart. . . questions all. . . answers few. . . just make sure that you've got an umbrella. . . the flow of this is well done. . . it's a good picture of what the character is seeing, feeling, and hearing. . . and, of the emotion that they're going through. . . great job. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh yes...I do love this! Knew I would... Just an amazing write...amazing...and a keeper. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 WOW!!! Ooohhhhhhh...I know just how you feel here, I too believe the weather can always symbolize how we feel and the warmth or the chill can be harbingers to what will follow! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, may the warmth of joy and hope always fill your heart! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sahring!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
suthern, you wipe that smirk off your face right now *very stern look* lol, ok, so I hide behind metaphors, whatcha gonna do about it? rofg sven thank you, am glad you enjoyed, seems you read it exactly how I wrote it, sometimes I write a metaphor (see suthern't smirk above) and unless you know me, the deeper meaning can go unnoticed, thank you for reading behind the words enchantress, you must have had some weather in your heart also thank you ladynoah, you are such a sweetie, you reach out to lift every poet up, thank you |
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