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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2002-03-17 08:00 PM

From the Soddy, 1876

My good and very true heart, I’m found within your kiss,
As I felt you came a’stealing this loving heart away
That you now have left me, absent of your bliss
I would then see in kind, your thoughts begin to stray.

As I felt you came a’stealing this loving heart away
Though I would gladly love you, just to see your smile.
I would then see in kind, your thoughts begin to stray
Though we are parted, this many, goodly mile.

Though I would gladly love you, just to see your smile,
For you said a true heart was all that you would need
Though we are parted, this many, goodly mile,
I wonder now, I gave it, more as a solemn deed.

For you said a true heart was all that you would need
To carry you forever, you would come back to me
I wonder now, I gave it, more as a solemn deed,
For I would touch again your love’s reality.

To carry you forever, you would come back to me
As true was your endeavor that my love you’d miss
For I would touch again your love’s reality
My good and very true heart, I’m found within your kiss.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

1 posted 2002-03-17 08:10 PM

Ah Karilea...how you manage to pick the reader up and sweep them along to the very end! How I wish I could write like this...perhaps one day I shall come close...perhaps. Enjoyed so much!
~Smiles, winks and hugs, Nancy~

SmartChick
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On A Journey To The Unknown

2 posted 2002-03-17 08:34 PM

Oh Karilea, this is fantastic. And, a beautiful poem.

Magnus

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South Carolina, USA

3 posted 2002-03-17 09:10 PM

I do like the flow of this...and so romantic.

Nice KJ, very nice..

Mistletoe Angel

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4 posted 2002-03-17 09:24 PM

(smiles) Awwwwwwww, this is such a gorgeous pantoum, sweet friend, your beautiful visions always amaze me! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is another timeless classic to add to your library of words! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thanbk you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

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British Columbia, Canada

5 posted 2002-03-18 12:59 PM

Now this one was so very soft and tender and oh yes, I really enjoyed it. Correct me if I am wrong but wasn't 1876 the year of the locusts? If not I have gone and got my notes mixed up again.

Moonlight Romeo

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since 2001-09-10

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The heart of you

6 posted 2002-03-18 12:17 PM

There is a certain softness that reaches even the most hard of hearts. That is here.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

7 posted 2002-03-18 01:12 PM

Sunshine,
A warm and lovely write, enjoyed

Martie

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8 posted 2002-03-18 02:49 PM

Karilea

This is enchanting..lovely and tender!

Sven

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East Lansing, MI USA

9 posted 2002-03-18 03:29 PM

wonderful my friend. . . a page from a memory. . . spoken in softness. . .

excellent. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Janet Marie
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10 posted 2002-03-19 09:23 AM

Well now....look who is being clever

I've seen "Soddy" in free verse and prose, in missives and diary page entries and now in rhymed pantoum.
There is no limits to this muse's possiblities in your pen.

Of all the things in me I could never be,
of the true I kept hidden from view,
the best parts of my heart ...
were the ones touched by you.

jm

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

11 posted 2002-03-19 09:54 AM

Sunshine;

a pleasure to view this
earth warmth spilled like syrup
on lady lap thoughts

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

12 posted 2002-03-19 10:02 AM

I love pantoums, this one was exceptional. Very good poem.

Nan

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