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D.Lester Young
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1219
Austin, Tx

0 posted 2002-03-17 04:07 PM

In the light of darkness
Lies the spirit to fly in weightlessness
Where the mind is absorbed in free thought
To escape the prison of confinement
Where the expanse within us floats free
In the mists of dreams coming true
On the wings of time in free flight
Letting the whirlwinds of currents dance within us
In the massage that frees our mind from its chains
In the unique creativity that be were blessed with
So let the starlight shine in that space

Email me at davelyoung1@hotmail.com
D.Lester Young (03/16/02)
Tuscaloosa, AL
Copyright © D.Lester Young (White Eagle poetry) www.authorsden.com/visit/...horID=5012

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2002-03-17 04:15 PM

BRAVO!!! Oohhhhhhh... this is wonderful, sweet friend, I couldn't agree with you more, I feel that when we find our way through the darkness, we learn more about ourselves through contemplation, and that is a benefit to us all! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is excellent! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

2 posted 2002-03-17 06:26 PM

Thank you for sharing such a wonderful poem with us

Andrew

"I have no strength or the decency in me to be a hero" - Biffy Clyro

PearlsB4Swine
Member

since 2002-02-01

Posts 130
where the heart finds me

3 posted 2002-03-17 07:31 PM

There were a lot of really good images here, I think a few more edits and this could become a really good piece. Removing some of the repeating words and perhaps rearranging the order of others? Can't quite put my finger on it...but if I may, a few tweeks?
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

In the light of darkness
Lies the spirit to fly in weightlessness
The mind absorbed in free(unbound?) thought
Escapes the prison of confinement
Where the expanse within us floats free(unhindered?)
(break here)
In the mists of dreams coming true
Wings of time born in full flight
Letting the whirlwinds of currents dance within us
The message frees(liberates) our mind from its(shackles?)chains
Permitting the unique creativity that we were blessed with
To let the starlight glow in once empty space
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Just a few examples to maybe help spur the muse a bit more? Please feel free to ignore me completely though!

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