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Outside My Window... (A Pantoum)
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Outside My Window... (A Pantoum) |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA 
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OUTSIDE MY WINDOW  Outside my window time and tide roll on, Caressing breeze of halcyon lagoon; Yet trice of sail and morrow's tides begone. Best sally fore ebbed waters flow eftsoon. Caressing breeze of halcyon lagoon, Inviting days of lollygagging pace; Best sally fore ebbed waters flow eftsoon, Laps offing seaward steadily apace. Inviting days of lollygagging pace, The drift of tide defines each sandy grain. Laps offing seaward steadily apace, As mere imprints of yesterday remain. The drift of tide defines each sandy grain. Let waves not flow slap-dash upon this shore, As mere imprints of yesterday remain; Today's a present gone forevermore. Let waves not flow slap-dash upon this shore; Each flush of dusk yields blush of dawn sublime. Today's a present gone forevermore; Here Trumpet's call to live life's full betime. Each flush of dusk yields blush of dawn sublime; Yet trice of sail and morrow's tides begone. Here Trumpet's call to live life's full betime, Outside my window time and tide roll on. A Simile is as easy as pie, but a Metaphor is a piece of cake ~*~ Nancy Ness [This message has been edited by Nan (03-17-2002 10:01 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan, A beautiful write, only as you can write it.  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) YAY!!! Oh my gosh, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, your gorgeous words always shine with such natural beauty and enchantment! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is a peaceful and spellbinding pantoum, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Nan, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Someday I shall have to show you just how wide you make me grin... here was my favorite... quote: |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is beautiful Nan, I could actually hear the "waves slap-dash upon the shore". I love the view outside your window too. greatly enjoyed Maree [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (03-17-2002 08:56 PM).] |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is beautiful Nan! I tried writing one of these myself. Atleast, that is what I intended for it to be. [This message has been edited by Mysteria (03-18-2002 01:07 AM).] |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh Lord you big show off you!  When I grow up I just might be able to write a pontoon but for now (or at least over the next few weeks anyway) I will just pray you have one tied up to that dock  I don't swim in open waters. Oh for goodness sake, alright here is some praise for you, as you earned it with this lovely pontoon  , now go enter it into Titia's little contest and win yourself a sheep! Hah! (kidding Titia)The pursuit of truth and beauty is a sphere of activity in which we are permitted to remain children all our lives. |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Ha Sharon, you want one? I'll send it over. Nan, this is just great, love the pic, Am I jealous if this is your windowview, I just love water (well not the kind that's coming from above LOL as it is coming here today) Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Thank you, fine poetic friends... Sy - Smooches -We've all got our own styles - I like yours just as much..  Noah - May love and light shine upon you as well, m'friend.. Sunshine - You made me do it... The house isn't clean yet either.. Maree - How nice to see you - It was worth writing just to bring your smiling face here.. SmartChick - Thankya - I'll be cruising through the workshop to see yours as well.. Mysteria - Um.. pontoon - Yeah - That's right - Maybe we can buy one while you're here...?? Titia - You made me use the theme - and thanks for that - It is indeed the view from my window - I've gotta say, I do love it... Thanks all -   |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
I happen to know first hand that Sun has no way of making you do anything you do not want to do...like writing...she can only make suggestions... As for me? You make me strive to find the talents hidden within... |
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Dunphy Member
since 2002-03-14
Posts 82Massachusetts USA |
i like ur poem you are doin a good job keep it up. i hope you come out wit more i would be delighted to read them and take my time. i juss wanted to let you know that i enjoyed readdin it and have fun we are a big family in here. from kevin reid aka dunphy 18 m mass. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Nan~ Absotively, posilutely PERFECT ! Ya' done REAL GOOD on this beauty~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Very beautiful and skillful rendering!!! You live in MA and so do I. The western part. Enjoyed this poem ever so much. ***Ivy Rose |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
What a beautiful view outside your window looking forward to the view |
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