Open Poetry #19 |
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Liquid Ghosts |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
My smile waits for my lips to rise above my etched frown, to take part in changing seasons, and to never again come down My stomach waits for laughter to blossom inside of me, to be touched by fluttering wings that will tickle me endlessly But I’m left to touch liquid ghosts that fall from these lonely eyes Haunting is their eerie descent amidst my constant, somber sighs They traverse down to my lips Their salty taste, a reminder of the love I let slip away, and of the life in which I squander © David 2002 [This message has been edited by GenXer (03-16-2002 11:48 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
GenXer, A very nice write. Enjoyed |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"But I’m left to touch liquid ghosts that fall from these lonely eyes Haunting is their eerie descent amidst my constant, somber sighs" this touches me.... (((hugs))) for you ![]() |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
GREAT title... |
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Marsha![]()
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Dave darling boy this is utterly utterly wonderful writing. As always your words are filled with a certain quality that is unique to you. I can feel those tears darling heart, that is the most telling description of tears Liquid Ghosts. Superb darling boy utterly superb, I keep telling you darling boy to banish those tears, you know I absolutely detest crying, it makes me look blotchy. How about a bit of steam darling boy, will that help clear the liquid ghosts? ![]() ![]() ![]() Love and warm stuff As always Mushy ![]() ![]() To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Victoria![]()
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
My stomach waits for laughter to blossom inside of me, to be touched by fluttering wings that will tickle me endlessly i love this and it is soooo true..i know these feelings well Dave..lovely ~Victoria~ |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Seymour, Susan, Victoria, Karilea, and Marsha, thansks for reading. And Marsha, it just might. ![]() Dave |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"They traverse down to my lips Their salty taste, a reminder of the love I let slip away, and of the life in which I squander" ![]() (big hugggsssssss) Oh David, this is so very sad, my heart goes out to you, for I too know these feelings very much, while I know I must go on, I reflect upon the torments of my youth and I can't help but tear up every time I think of it! (sad sigh) This is sad but wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet David, thank you for sharing! ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
But I’m left to touch liquid ghosts that fall from these lonely eyes Haunting is their eerie descent amidst my constant, somber sighs They traverse down to my lips Their salty taste, a reminder of the love I let slip away, and of the life in which I squander ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ beautiful write... so very sad Hope all is well.... Connie |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
"But I’m left to touch liquid ghosts that fall from these lonely eyes Haunting is their eerie descent amidst my constant, somber sighs' Hmm this is lovely, a sad poem, really, and Dave you haven't squandered your life, I mean, You have been writing beautiful poetry for us all to enjoy. Now that is not squandering. It is spreading happiness. thanks for this one. Made me think. floria Floria "Alas for those that never sing, But die with all their music in them" (Oliver Wendell Holmes) [This message has been edited by strbbux (03-16-2002 02:54 PM).] |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I loved the way you used language in this one. A quiet, longing, sadness comes from it. Nan |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Your words are lucid and transparent...ones I can most certainly relate to, the feeling of being so close and yet so far away. Reminded me of seeing through the ripples underwater. Nice writing~ |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Dave Hi there, Make way mum for the younger prettier model This is a wonderful poem Dave a perfect description of that longing sadness, liquid ghosts. Don’t take any notice of mum Dave, I’d help you chase those ghosts away much quicker than she would After all who wouldn’t prefer the younger racier model? This is a very well written and excellent piece of writing. You know I’m only teasing mum of course ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Beautifully done, Dave...but please don't squander your life....it goes fast! ![]() copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
When I read the title, my first thought was “damn, these green beers are going to come back to haunt me”!!!. But, of course, your poem goes much deeper than that (okay, it’s only me that’s this shallow!! Lol) Love that last verse They traverse down to my lips Their salty taste, a reminder of the love I let slip away, and of the life in which I squander Wow, how true. How often do we let love slip away, and squander life? You’ve made me think of my own life…maybe in a different perspective. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
It doesn't get any easier as one gets older. GenX. It's good to write about them, though. Helps some. Take care, Cor |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
David, I guess, like everyone else, this touched my heart. Such sad beauty. A must for my library, I feel. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Sad;yet brilliantly penned. GenXer...Hope your heart is touched by love again and that your life becomes a joy to live. ***Ivy Rose |
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