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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 2002-03-16 03:57 PM




A Crystal in the Dark


Dawn was cast in shades of grays
As heavy mist hung o’er the cays
The sun was there, but taupe the skies
Through smoky topaz misty eyes

Candescent voice of steel cold heart
Was telling me we had to part
Never more to walk these sands
Where we had loved on crystal strands

Where are the joys of ruby nights
The fiery red of love’s delights?
Your portrait now of palette bland
Burnt umber heart on canvas sand

The white of sun behind the haze
Brings on an iridescent gaze
Your tawny glare and ashen face
Reflect this beach, now void of grace

Sienna copper sun-baked skin
Was hiding truth you held within
The black of lies, the dark ecru
The total essence that was you

Opaque the thoughts of mottled mind
In murky visions twist and wind
Where colors of a rainbow arc
Are crystals hidden in the dark

The rolling waves of indigo
Now changed to crests of silvery glow
You look with pierce of steel gray spears
Into my eyes adrift in tears

You once had eyes of emerald green
Now shadowed panes of tourmaline
Where once a spectrum of delight
Lit up the sands on starlit nights

Now I must walk this beach alone
In shades of sorrows undertones
And search my heart for other schemes
For crimson skies and coral dreams

And molded alabaster dunes
Will echo sea’s cyanic tunes

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (03-16-2002 03:58 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-03-16 04:03 PM


This must set some kind of record for numbers of  colors mentioned in one poem! I'm curious as to the title, Liz. Is this a poem you wrote about yourself, as if you have lost, or divorced, a part of yourself and are addressing the issue? At any rate, it contains you normal brilliance...
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2 posted 2002-03-16 04:05 PM


LOL! Well, that answers my question! So much for analysis!!
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3 posted 2002-03-16 04:10 PM



Lady Santos, this leaves me with no words, just a feeling of awe, and the knowledge that some day, I want to be able to write like you...

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4 posted 2002-03-16 04:10 PM


This is an incredible write with so many undertones to it.  Enjoyed your words.
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5 posted 2002-03-16 04:13 PM


Such beautiful imagery and a masterful piece of art.  I truly enjoyed this one Liz.  I agree with Sunshine....someday I want to master this in the way that you do.  Truly incredible Liz.  Hugs.

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

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6 posted 2002-03-16 04:43 PM


Liz, words cannot say how this makes me feel. But to say I understand, and you write this so amazingly.
Sandra

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7 posted 2002-03-16 07:05 PM


Liz, this poem is simply beautiful - words from the heart.
Elizabeth Santos
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8 posted 2002-03-16 07:06 PM


Balladeer,

This is "just a poem". It's not about anyone that I know. It's about a couple walking along in the sand at dawn as the sun is rising the colors change, but many of the dark colors refer to his cold heart as he is leaving her. The crystal in the dark again is his heart that one was open to the sun and shome a spectrum of colors is now in the dark.His green eyes are now color of tourmaline , a semiprecious stone in the emerald family but dark and hazy.
Anyway, thank you for your response. Hope I cleared up any question

Sunshine, Since you are way more talented, it would not enhance you talents to write like me! hehe. Your poetry is exquisite and quite versetile just as it is. Thanks, dear

sigheyes, it seems like you understood my hazy poem. Thank you.

Gentle Spirit, Oh, thank you so much. You comments much appreciated!

liz

Elizabeth Santos
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9 posted 2002-03-16 07:14 PM


catalina moon, THank you very much for your kind comments!

munda, your words are so kind, Thank you

Liz

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10 posted 2002-03-16 07:18 PM


You write just as beautifully in iambic tetrameter as you do in pentameter...
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11 posted 2002-03-16 07:35 PM




BRAVO!!! Ooohhhhhhh...this is wonderful though sad, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you but I know deep down with all my heart you will find your place over your rainbow and hold true colorful love close to your heart forever much more precious than any diamond on the earth! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is excellent, it is such a delight to read your gorgeous words again! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Elizabeth, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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12 posted 2002-03-16 07:43 PM


Thanks, Liz. When I responded, the title of the poem was still "Elizabeth Santos" so I thought maybe there was some personal inter-communication there. Then, of course, when the title changed, that made it different...

Do you know how much I love your writing?

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13 posted 2002-03-16 08:06 PM


you are such a fine writer, Liz...

this is an amazing piece of poetry...

i admire you!!!

Elizabeth Santos
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14 posted 2002-03-16 10:20 PM


Nan, oh, Nan, you love my tetrameter! ( which is a tropical fish with rhythm) I'm so thrilled! Thanks.
I know, I've gone a little nuts, I'll explain it all whenever I see you.

Noah, thank you dear friend, so glad you liked this poem

Balladeer, It's been so long since I've posted, that i wrote my name in the title box. Thank you dear for such a sweet remark. FRom you, it is an honor.

Doreen, I also feel the same about your remarks as with Balladeer's,  for I have admired your talents for so long, You words come to me with warmth and affection
Thank you so much

Liz


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