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A Crystal in the Dark
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A Crystal in the Dark |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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A Crystal in the Dark Dawn was cast in shades of grays As heavy mist hung o’er the cays The sun was there, but taupe the skies Through smoky topaz misty eyes Candescent voice of steel cold heart Was telling me we had to part Never more to walk these sands Where we had loved on crystal strands Where are the joys of ruby nights The fiery red of love’s delights? Your portrait now of palette bland Burnt umber heart on canvas sand The white of sun behind the haze Brings on an iridescent gaze Your tawny glare and ashen face Reflect this beach, now void of grace Sienna copper sun-baked skin Was hiding truth you held within The black of lies, the dark ecru The total essence that was you Opaque the thoughts of mottled mind In murky visions twist and wind Where colors of a rainbow arc Are crystals hidden in the dark The rolling waves of indigo Now changed to crests of silvery glow You look with pierce of steel gray spears Into my eyes adrift in tears You once had eyes of emerald green Now shadowed panes of tourmaline Where once a spectrum of delight Lit up the sands on starlit nights Now I must walk this beach alone In shades of sorrows undertones And search my heart for other schemes For crimson skies and coral dreams And molded alabaster dunes Will echo sea’s cyanic tunes [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (03-16-2002 03:58 PM).] |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This must set some kind of record for numbers of colors mentioned in one poem! I'm curious as to the title, Liz. Is this a poem you wrote about yourself, as if you have lost, or divorced, a part of yourself and are addressing the issue? At any rate, it contains you normal brilliance...  |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
LOL!  Well, that answers my question! So much for analysis!!  |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Lady Santos, this leaves me with no words, just a feeling of awe, and the knowledge that some day, I want to be able to write like you... |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
This is an incredible write with so many undertones to it. Enjoyed your words. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Such beautiful imagery and a masterful piece of art. I truly enjoyed this one Liz. I agree with Sunshine....someday I want to master this in the way that you do. Truly incredible Liz. Hugs. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Liz, words cannot say how this makes me feel. But to say I understand, and you write this so amazingly. Sandra |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Liz, this poem is simply beautiful - words from the heart. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Balladeer, This is "just a poem". It's not about anyone that I know. It's about a couple walking along in the sand at dawn as the sun is rising the colors change, but many of the dark colors refer to his cold heart as he is leaving her. The crystal in the dark again is his heart that one was open to the sun and shome a spectrum of colors is now in the dark.His green eyes are now color of tourmaline , a semiprecious stone in the emerald family but dark and hazy. Anyway, thank you for your response. Hope I cleared up any question Sunshine, Since you are way more talented, it would not enhance you talents to write like me! hehe. Your poetry is exquisite and quite versetile just as it is. Thanks, dear sigheyes, it seems like you understood my hazy poem. Thank you. Gentle Spirit, Oh, thank you so much. You comments much appreciated! liz |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
catalina moon, THank you very much for your kind comments! munda, your words are so kind, Thank you Liz |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You write just as beautifully in iambic tetrameter as you do in pentameter...  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  BRAVO!!! Ooohhhhhhh...this is wonderful though sad, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you but I know deep down with all my heart you will find your place over your rainbow and hold true colorful love close to your heart forever much more precious than any diamond on the earth! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is excellent, it is such a delight to read your gorgeous words again! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Elizabeth, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Thanks, Liz. When I responded, the title of the poem was still "Elizabeth Santos" so I thought maybe there was some personal inter-communication there. Then, of course, when the title changed, that made it different... Do you know how much I love your writing? |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
you are such a fine writer, Liz... this is an amazing piece of poetry... i admire you!!! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Nan, oh, Nan, you love my tetrameter! ( which is a tropical fish with rhythm) I'm so thrilled! Thanks. I know, I've gone a little nuts, I'll explain it all whenever I see you. Noah, thank you dear friend, so glad you liked this poem Balladeer, It's been so long since I've posted, that i wrote my name in the title box. Thank you dear for such a sweet remark. FRom you, it is an honor. Doreen, I also feel the same about your remarks as with Balladeer's, for I have admired your talents for so long, You words come to me with warmth and affection Thank you so much Liz |
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