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PoetryIsLife

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...in my boxers...

0 posted 2002-03-15 05:53 PM

Needing love,
getting warmth from the stove.
I sit here here alone,
alone, knawing on a bone.
I cry, I do cry.
Everyone will not see through the lies.
Why?
On the floor I lie,
looking at the dirt and dust.
My senses want to lust.
But I, I am alone.
knawing on a bone.

3/15/02

[This message has been edited by PoetryIsLife (03-15-2002 05:56 PM).]

PoetryIsLife

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since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

1 posted 2002-03-15 05:55 PM

Forgive me of my horrible poetry. Lately, as some of you know, I've been dealing with a lot of trauma and stress. Before that, my life was so hectic, I couldn't find time to write. But now... it is therapy. So, I regret to post such evil writes, but eventually, I will write something well. Till then, thanks.

~ Titus

I'm dealing with too much.... I'm loosing control.

[This message has been edited by PoetryIsLife (03-15-2002 05:56 PM).]

Skyfire

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2 posted 2002-03-15 06:12 PM

Interrrrrresting my friend. I've never thought of writing like that. Verrrrrrry interrrrrresting! Grrrrreat read!

I am a rabid horse.

RosePetal

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since 2001-08-26

Posts 2985
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3 posted 2002-03-15 08:13 PM

all bones and no meat?! Aw Titus, I am sure u will find the love you crave really soon!
Everyone has a hunger for love, I know I do

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

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Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2002-03-15 08:18 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Oh Daniel, this is so very sad, my heart goes out to you and your tears and I hope soon you will find all your heart desires and joy will sing in your heart always! (sigh) My thoughts are always with you, sweet friend, we all love you so much, God Bless You! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Daniel, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

PoetryIsLife

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...in my boxers...

5 posted 2002-03-16 12:49 PM

Thank you Noah! Your kind words and caring comments brightened my day.

~ Titus

My motto... always changing, always improving, veiwing life in veiw of eternity.

Local Parasite

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since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

6 posted 2002-03-19 12:40 PM

A lot of your rhymes were forced. That made this poem sound kind of immature and inelegant. Other than that it was a good write!

Theo

PoetryIsLife

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since 2001-10-27

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7 posted 2002-03-19 02:48 PM

I long to write deep poetry... but with everything that has happened... my mind and actions are on other things. Please, have patience.

Eventually... I'll write something that deserves to be out here.... which poses the question, why is this one here? Hmm...

~ Titus

My motto... always changing, always improving, living life in veiw of eternity.

Dark Enchantress
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8 posted 2002-03-19 03:23 PM

I liked it a lot. It doesn't sound like too many other things I find around here, which makes it all the more interesting. I'm really into symbolism and metaphors so of course I found a lot in this that pleased me. Don't worry about your poetry right now. As long as its honest it'll be interesting and beautiful... with honesty you can't go wrong. Keep it real.

"The most beautiful makeup for a woman is passion, but cosmetics are easier to buy." - Yves Saint Laurent

Cela passera.

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PoetryIsLife

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9 posted 2002-03-20 02:55 AM

My motto... always changing, always improving, living life in veiw of eternity.

baerlon
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10 posted 2002-03-20 05:48 AM

Hey you'd be suprised what how deep a simple poem can be. Whether you think it or not this poem is deep and expresses alot about your feelings. I thought it was very well done. thx for the read

There's a peace inside us all
Let it be your friend
It will help you carry on
In the end
There's a peace inside us all
-Creed

PoetryIsLife

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11 posted 2002-03-20 05:54 AM

Why thank you! I appreciate that.

~ Titus

My motto... always changing, always improving, living life in veiw of eternity.

Marshalzu

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12 posted 2002-03-20 11:08 AM

I really enjoyed the read but a word of advice don't try and write deep poetry, the depth comes from the true emotion that you put into a poem, other than that I really thought that this was a cool poem.

Andrew

I give huggles for replies :)

Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04

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Texas, USA

13 posted 2002-03-20 01:11 PM

"Needing love, getting warmth from the stove"-that's deep to me. Symbolic, all that stuff. I liked the poem. Don't apologize for it.

Nan

ShadowRider
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14 posted 2002-03-20 06:34 PM

Fully empathsize and support your 'wayback' home!
Don't apologize for letting your soul speak it's mind.
That's what poetry is for, P.Life!

Enjoy your writing.  Free association
and free flow is allowed!  The floor is all yours!
one hint, tho:  select your dance partner(s) carefully!  *s*
Jeff

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