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A Day of Life
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A Day of Life |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea 
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A Day of Life Youth, as breaking dawn, held cheerful songs of birds in chorus. Dew’s sweet taste, was not wasted on my tongue, but savored. Damp grasses fell silent to small feet, and recorded childish giggles. Day crept forward, stealthily, ‘til midday sun broke sweat upon brow, stinging eyes. Hands worked, as all hands must. At times, entangled in briars, I watched them weep. As setting sun bled crimson light to paint fading clouds. I looked back on day, trying to find missing hours, regretful they had passed so quickly and unnoticed. Now, raising eyes, I see that I’m entrapped within a bowl of distant fiery suns, wondering, how long is night? I hear forlorn singing of crickets. In distance, a scream, as some unwary creature has been snatched unto death. Sitting, I pull knees to chest, knowing, dawn has long since passed and what’s left of life is night. Hours grow steadily fewer, as I await the piercing of this bowl of stars, upon death's stilled heart. ~Michael Auguste~ Stars will shine when I am gone |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
This has some sadness to it Michael. I have also worked hard and felt those sweat beads burning in my eyes and the most beautiful part of the day has been wasted it seems on work. But then the work produced is worthy of the hours spent on it. And thank God we have the cool night to rest. I love this piece so much. floria Floria |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Floria, Thank you much. This poem compares a person's life to the length of a day. Morning is childhood, midday is the middle of life and night is the waning years. I'm glad you liked this piece. Michael Stars will shine when I am gone |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Michael, I love how softly this poem speaks, as well as the imagery. Beautifully done... *smiles* ~Tier |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
The metaphors are perfect Michael. This flows so smoothly....almost melancholey, but so beautiful. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
At least i have the night left ha..hopefully the moon will shine..nicely done michael..i really enjoyed this one...hugs ~Victoria |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lovely use of a day to show a life...Michael..beautiful imagery and thought in this. Hugs! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Such a perfect title Michael...and doesn't it all pass too quickly? especially the beauty of it all. *s M |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Michael, this is soooooo beautiful but a little sad, sweet friend, it too always saddens me to think of life reflecting like this and how we feel we miss the sunrise and wish not for the day's end to come so fast when we just want to feel the light of morning always! (sigh) This is a very lovely and wonderfully expressed poem, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Your use of metaphors, theme and imagery is outstanding. I applaud the mastery of this poem and was greatly moved by the melancholy truth at the end. You write the dark with a classic and graceful style. Now I know why I admire your talent so much  This is a keeper!~ Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Perfectly penned, day in the life, Michael. I'm headed back for another read... And into my library it goes! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Michael, Your descriptions are wonderful.. I really enjoyed  Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
So beautifully written Michael. Our human awareness of mortality, and the passing of life too quickly... and the sorrow that we feel when the middle seems like it is the end... So much talent poet. ThisDiamond |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I like the way ThisDiamond said it...so I am dittoing the remarks... a splendid piece, Michael... |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Everyone, You have no idea how good your comments make me feel. I worked on this poem for more than four hours, writing and re-writing it over and over. That you enjoyed it, pleases me immensely. Life just slip by so very quickly and like me, I'm sure many of you look back in regret and wonder why you allowed so many years to go by unnoticed. Savor your days, is the only advice I can give, as I've learned to savor each one of my own. Thank you all. Michael Stars will shine when I am gone |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Michael, this is one of your best.....truly a heart felt write, and just "wow" I love it gonna keep it too (((hugs))) |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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