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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Rewrite Repost: Commitment She the tongue and I the shell And two souls clashed in the swell Brought about a ghost of new Echoes to eternity flew. As a cry escaped the bell Nirvana touches every shore Resonating forever more The common swell that rings for thee Circles round and sounds for me. Ridding air that rapes the store. Shaking loose the common bield Raging o’er the common field Bending in forever’s bend Sending it a journeys end. Crushing to the common yield Of holy vows and oaths assail I bare my back against the flail Baptized in a common core Hand and hand forevermore. The sound forever rings in sail. It wails in swell, that tongue struck shell Tolling o’er an endless hell. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour darling boy Oh my I’m stunned with admiration this has got to be one of you utter utter best. Truly the line and flow in this is absolutely excellent. I can actually feel the depth of this, this is utterly utterly wonderful How do you manage to do these so well darling boy? Truly awesome writing. You are always a fabulous writer, in this you have excelled yourself. If you keep writing like this I shall start running out of superlatives and that would never do would it?  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy   To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mushy, You will never run out. and thank you. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Commitment to Forever is good, dear Sy...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan, See you soon. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Of holy vows and oaths assail I bare my back against the flail Baptized in a common core Hand and hand forevermore. The sound forever rings in sail. It wails in swell, that tongue struck shell Tolling o'er an endless hell. ===================================== If I picked up a shell on your beaches of understand...what would I hear when I put it to me ear? RHYMES OF WAAAAY COOL...thats what!! the shell would yell...Sybabers--YER SO KEWL  *ww*  You never knew what I loved in you, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, You are my buterfly And I am your sigh. And Randy's bent out of shape And I don't know why? Winkiewinkie, Stinky. |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Seymour, oh my, I am running out of word of praise for you. so I will say. TREMENDOUS write, floria Floria |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...Aye, how then the committed self takes dusted icon from the shelf... Bravo, my good and forever Sy! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Floria, Sunshine, |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Strong, well done, and much enjoyed. Sandra |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Saeymour, this is fantastic, enjoyed, enjoyed!  Maree |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
enjoyed the read, the relationship between mollusc and its immediate home translated into oceanic terms |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
sy~ this was a splendid read. i really liked the images you brought up with this...truly a work of art! great write. take care. amy "just because someone doesn't love you as you'd like them to, does not mean they don't love you with all their heart" |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sandra, Thank you sweet. Dark Angel, Glad you enjoyed. Ecrivan, Enjoyed your comment. aimster, Beautiful response, thank you. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
She the tongue and I the shell The pursuit of truth and beauty is a sphere of activity in which we are permitted to remain children all our lives. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sharon, You got it. Thank you, see you soon. |
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