Open Poetry #19 |
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Meditation |
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Martie
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Posts 28049California ![]() |
Meditation In the deep of listening I sway a seaweed dance where breathing is sweet intoxication and my hair like dark rain, rains up, orange fish with marble eyes enclose themselves there in green twilight daydream flowing past precision’s dart, this grace is slithering silent soft and there is no voice but a flutter sings like winged bird captured above a flower stilled yet vibrant in delight of nectar waiting - waiting this verdant display to capture bliss. The sound moves through the grass drinking dew it floats across blade and fulfills its silent velvet grace in a sigh that feathers across the swamp and through the briar's blistered path that time made to a wealth of purple lupine then waiting there in divine seclusion a dance a dance a dance that drenches every pore with feeling and peace so sultry so inclusive I’m lost for the open that I’ve melted. ---- 6-00 |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
If we listen just carefully enough.. We shall see your words dancing among your "meditations"... Lovely, Martie.. as always... ![]() |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
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Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() ![]() ![]() (smiles) Awwwwwww, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I felt as though I was on the bayou looking down at the lily-pads and watching the frogs leap about with the koi in the warm summer morning! (kiss on cheek) Your words always make me smile and dream away, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
What a meditation this was! I love it when you take me with you on your journeys! The line "through the briar's blistered path" leaped out and gripped me. Delicious. |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Wonderfully written, Martie. ![]() ((Martie)) -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, A delightful read, thank you. |
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Nightshade![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
In the deep of listening I sway a seaweed dance where breathing is sweet intoxication and my hair like dark rain, rains up Awesome Martie!! Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Martie, this sounds like it could be two poems out of one meditation, paleeeze? Oh, but this was so beautiful, and the visions of hair swimming up used to be my favorite thing to do as a child. The pursuit of truth and beauty is a sphere of activity in which we are permitted to remain children all our lives. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful Martie..much enjoyed today! Hugs. ~Sometimes all you really wish for... |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Where is my little red wagon when it comes to holding all of the feelings you bring out...? Under your tree, perhaps? |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
this grace is slithering silent soft and there is no voice but a flutter sings like winged bird captured above a flower stilled yet vibrant in delight of nectar waiting - waiting this verdant display to capture bliss. You have a brilliant way with words, Martie... Loved this! ![]() copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
And there's another one...(hunting out your poems that I've missed btw, lol)... I've found something to critique *phew* - that was hard work... er...but it's only one line.. 'this grace is slithering silent soft' it just doesn't work for me...maybe it's the sibilance, maybe it's the combination of slithering and silent...whatever it is, I'm uncomfortable with it - thought I'd point it out.... otherwise - the rest, your usual air-stealing standard... hugs ![]() |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
I like this very much. You've captured this moment very well. |
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