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The Invitation
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The Invitation |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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Communal spirits hits hard in havoked families money comes between, family ties turn weak In-law rules set in, outlook is bleak widened gap hits those with fewer amenities. Invitations are shred over kitchen sinks an air of discomfort...people do not gravitate; company that does not congeal..it hestitates ancestors, now thin memory, once kept fond links. Black jackets that sit on straight back chairs face warm hearths and young eyes buldge and stare; sinewy hands wrench messages from brimmed hats a thought sparks...'I am in company of rats'. Children run away and play..they feel protected black jacket fidgets, sniffs the air is infected; groupies nudge around the host... money comfort feels nice solitary man, reminded of differences, feels hair lice. Festive spirits turn sour, communal ties turn weak in-law rules draw attention, set double standard peaks sinewy hands wrench message from straight backed chairs face adoring relatives, judgemental with their glassy stares. [This message has been edited by ecrivan (03-14-2002 10:03 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ecrivan, Good write, enjoyed the read. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
When the very best of life, relationships... are lost to the commerce of society...Do we know what freedom really is? High Impact, delivered at dawn. ThisDiamond |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Ecrivan, you remind me of some souls I know. Good write! Thanks!  ((ecrivan)) -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Diamond, lost to the commerce of society..I like that expression..they are slaves to that commerce too! |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Newell, It is insoired by a good childhood friend faced by his sister-in-laws double standards.. wanting to show generosity with tight fists..if you know what I mean |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Seymour, looking at the ugly side of pretencious invites, since Passover is around the corner, glad you liked this! |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* an invitation the fills me with sadness that people can be like this...sometimes I wonder what happened to love and happiness....Very well put...touches the heart...**big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! Oh Martin, it too saddens me to see commerce tarnishing relationships nowadays, I wish we could be more free like we used to and love someone for who they are rather than be forced to be wrapped up in the economical sense! (big huggssssss) This is very well expressed, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martin, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Karen, commerce causes its afflictions..what can I say!thanks for sharing |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Noah, this is the real world, I'm afraid..but some have it nice!Thanks for your kind thoughts. |
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