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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2002-03-12 10:52 AM



Learned Traits


he wore
a shirt
of clean white
pressed
that’s the way
he always
dressed
and the smell
to this very day
I still think
nice
the comforting
scent of
old spice
all shoes
he had were
always with
shine
done by another
never with
his own
time
his face
was always
the same
as his
shoes
no difference
in sad or happy
news
bred in me
such good and bad
traits
he was
the first man
I learned
to love
and hate

"Pour yourself thick, when it is you, that you spread."

© Copyright 2002 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
Alicethruglass
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1 posted 2002-03-12 11:04 AM


hmmmmm...a good thoughtful poem...with more than one possibility.

~A~

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Deep in the heart
2 posted 2002-03-12 11:54 AM


Do you really like Old Spice?!?

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2002-03-12 12:06 PM


1slick_lady
Clever, I enjoyed the read.

Honeybee
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4 posted 2002-03-12 12:27 PM



This hit me hard!  This reminds me of my father... Well expressed!

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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Canada eh.
5 posted 2002-03-12 01:57 PM


Very interesting Helen.  Enjoyed this piece.
~Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain~

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6 posted 2002-03-12 03:12 PM




(sigh) Wow, this is sooooooo powerfully heartfelt, sweet friend, I too know just how you feel and I believe if there are a few things you hate about a person, it is best to try and face them and earn their respect and forgiveness in the long run, and if its re-occurring, then we can't have the heart to forgive! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is very powerful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Helen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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