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Krawdad
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since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

0 posted 2002-03-12 01:13 AM

The draft of your ice

You left the crumbs the crust the bones
the shell the hollowness the cold

the draft of your ice . . .

have you noticed
anything missing?

I think you feel nothing no touch no kiss
no heart no soul no tenderness no warmth

the cold of your silence . . .

you haven’t noticed
things missing.

You took my days my nights my love my
life my energy my spirit

the emptiness of my day . . .

have you noticed
we do not share?

I think you lost your desire your need
your want your curiosity your promise

the dryness of your remains . . .

you haven’t noticed
the missing marriage.

© (rev.)03.11.02

"As soon as the generals and the politicos can predict the motions of your mind, lose it." Wendell Berry

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2002-03-12 01:37 AM

A very solumn write and one I know I could unfortunately relate to. Excellent flow of coldness in this one, that many have felt I am sure.

The pursuit of truth and beauty is a sphere of activity in which we are permitted to remain children all our lives.
~* Albert Einstein *~

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2002-03-12 07:23 AM

Sometimes a poem like this makes me feel so not alone in my feelings...

*there was a time when no matter who would tell me, I would deny anyone could feel the way I was feeling at the moment.

M

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2002-03-12 07:34 AM

Krawdad,
An interesting write, enjoyed

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

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California

4 posted 2002-03-12 10:12 AM

Krawdad

It is sad that so many live their lives in the cold. Well done.

Dee
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since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

5 posted 2002-03-12 04:35 PM

you haven’t noticed
the missing marriage.

Oh I noticed.

Dee

I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

6 posted 2002-03-12 04:38 PM

(big hugggssssss) This is so very sad, sweet friend, my heart goes out to everyone who loses time and their love so coldly like this and are left alone to cope with the heartaches in response! (sad sigh) This is so very sad but well-written, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet E.J, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

mirror man
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since 2001-01-08

Posts 814

7 posted 2002-03-15 05:30 PM

Krawdad,

This is so cold. A sincerely chilling read. Excellent work.

strbbux
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since 2001-12-19

Posts 3859

8 posted 2002-03-15 07:08 PM

This is of course sad, as you meant it to be Krawdad. And it is so sad that lives go on like this. I know many in this situation. Hope the sun comes up bright for you tomorrow. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

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