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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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Heart Shaped Pinata Blindfold your pity for a tethered heart marked "fragile" in layers suffocated with paste that's all dried up from paper mache tears. There's no candy-coated smiles or prize within nor is it decorated in kaleidoscope gown and there is no glue strong enough that can put my humpty dumpty dreams back together again. My heart is your pinata, it's already bruised and cracked, broken and barely hanging on. Ill of repair with fractured beat it no longer sways with pride in air. So, please, you must strike it down, at least you can get pleasure out of something I can't. By Melissa P. Monette [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (03-12-2002 07:43 PM).] |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Melissa, Aww  I love reading your poems, but I hate seeing them be so sad. *hugs* I hope you are happier than what this leads to belive..Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
Really really good original and innovative imagery. In fact, I think the idea of a pinata is strong enough that you might consider setting the first two stanzas on their own as they stick to that idea very closely and still convey strong emotion. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Melissa, this is so very sad, my heart goes out to your tears. (sad sigh) I hope now this feeling doesn't apply to your heart and now it is treated with trust and loving care always that you deserve so much! (kiss on cheek) My thoughts are with you, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Melissa, Good original writing, enjoyed the read. |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Fantastic poem. Although you did make a tear leak.  ((Melissa)) -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Sadly beautiful work. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
wow...I liked..very much...I felt this way once..you know how they say time heals..I never believed it..( I am no expert but) I think it's a combination of time and honesty and if done properly, in a gentle way, the bitterness leaves....eventually. hugsssss ~A~ [This message has been edited by Alicethruglass (03-12-2002 11:02 AM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Blindfold your pity for a tethered heart marked "fragile" in layers suffocated with paste that's all dried up from paper mache tears. ============================== We are going to have to add Queen of Metaphor and theme to your title Melis... clever moment of inspire ... written with your pen of angst. well done poetess Melibee You never knew what I loved in you, |
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Chelsea~ Member
since 2001-02-09
Posts 260Ontario, CANADA |
missy, you used this theme to powerful perfection! I liked the use of 'humpty dumpty heart' |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
Brilliantly shaped metaphors, Melissa.....and indeed, the feeling of being a Pinata is not a pleasant one. Seems always that the ones being struck have not the heart to strike back and make the 'other' endure what they dish out. Which makes you even more caring, M. ~hugg~` and hang in there! (no pun intended) Jeff |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
Melissa, I am so sorry that your heart has been bruised and battered. But you did a wonderful job of conveying what you feel in this poem. ***Ivy Rose |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
What better than a pinata to be used as the metaphor for the poem, as truly it does feel like that when being hit spontaneously. I would say it is time to definitely "get out of Mexico"  The pursuit of truth and beauty is a sphere of activity in which we are permitted to remain children all our lives. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
this is an interesting metaphor that you've used here Melissa. . . one that lends itself quite well to the idea that you're working with here. . . the idea that the heart, like the pinata, is beaten all too much. . .but, the heart, unlike the pinata, if empty. . . yields nothing. . . well done my friend. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Very different from your normal poems Melissa, but equally good written. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Melissa, a wonderful write. I've felt like this at times. Hope its not to real for you. Parker |
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