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I don’t suppose it matters that it is autumn.
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I don’t suppose it matters that it is autumn. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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I don’t suppose it matters that it is autumn. The air is in its original condition; worn and used: It is as always in its enormity suffocating me with recollections once again. In its dampness, I remember how stupidly happy I was just sitting with you (or was that happily stupid?) I would watch your jet-black lashes greet your nearly coloured-of-almond cheeks Ev-e-ry time revealing the deep-green-sovereignty of your eyes without their usual covering; and nude. This always held me in a stupor And sometimes when yesterday finally catches up rustling her nut-brown leaves from second-hand Eucalypts It still does. Maree [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (03-12-2002 01:42 AM).] |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Excellent...very nicely done..love the ending... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Awwwwwwwww, your imagety always make sme smile, sweet friend, this is so sweet and gorgeous! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is beautiful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maree, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree The seasons change bring memories to me too..I like the way you used color to bring out the emotion...the ending was great! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I like this very much, Maree...as Martie said, it was very clever the way you used colors, which Autumn is known for, to relate to the end of a bright, or sunny, love affair on it's way to the cold freeze of winter. I guess that's why they call it Fall..... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
In its dampness, I remember how stupidly happy I was just sitting with you (or was that happily stupid?) Amen. Let us remember. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed this very much...James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awwww, this is a great piece! Very nice, loved it! I can relate to that "sitting there happily, stupidly, just to look at you" thing. Some men are just that way, so beautiful...so captivating...even after they are gone. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
... brought tears to eyes, M. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I see fickle love uncomfortable on limbs of knobbly bark sun on head and foot framed by a tiny but pretty harbour whose boats are at rest I see inspiration of sunsets and acceptance of the following darkness and the awakening of fond memories with every new day You feel autumnal and it matters It has to because you reminded me of a coming spring. J[This message has been edited by Jamie (03-12-2002 08:46 PM).] |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Maree, this was achingly beautiful-- one of your finest pieces or at least i think so. you have such a gifted talent my friend and it's a wonderful treat to read the gold that flares from your poets pen! thank you for sharing. take care. i'll be in touch with you soon. love ya. amy "Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Gee Jamie - that's such a touching poem |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Magnus, Thank you so very much for having a read, glad you liked. Noah, thank you so much. Hi Martie, so glad you liked, thanks so much for your lovely reply Deer, yup I guess that's why they call it Fall. Thanks for stopping by and having a read. Duncan, Amen indeed! Thank you. James, glad you enjoyed. I thank you. Passing Shadows, thank you for your lovely reply and for stopping by. SB, I am sorry. Jamie, dear friend I see fickle love uncomfortable on limbs of knobbly bark sun on head and foot framed by a tiny but pretty harbour whose boats are at rest I see inspiration of sunsets and acceptance of the following darkness and the awakening of fond memories with every new day You feel autumnal and it matters It has to because you reminded me of a coming spring. This is so achingly beautiful. Thank you. love you. Miss Amy  You are always so kind and generous with your replies. Thank you so very much Hon.Thank you all so very much for your lovely replies and for stopping by, I appreciate it so much. Maree |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
"Ev-e-ry time " sweet. this was very cool, a melancholic remembrance... a lot of that going on lately. peace C |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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S Arthur Grey Senior Member
since 2001-03-19
Posts 719woven by a poet's loom |
Maree, This has a very genuine feel to it. Well done! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It's a keeper...the imagery alone makes it a keeper, the memories...bring back a lifetime... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
have I told you just how excellent a writer you are my friend??? and, if you ever need to hear it, just take a look at this poem. . . it's amazing. . . the form of it, the way that the lines fall onto the page. . . and the subject. . . handled in so perfect a manner, that it just stands right on the page. . . the emotions are quite real, and it reaches out and touches the heart of the reader. . . just like me. . . beautiful my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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