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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Hush In the time before She leaned to shut the door When all her feelings wore her thin For she thought all fathers were the same Torn pieces that would be cut again Breathing seemed the only safe sound He was the somber of the living room she thought perhaps it was something Something she did Something she didn’t do But to be safe She roomed herself in a book And only took to slamming the door When her spirit broke So she did nothing with her bellowing Except that swallowing Until she met the music Then she stomped it on piano keys In loud abandon And a tickle of chaos A dirge of truth that closed ears For he knew not to tell her hush then |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
In the time before She leaned to shut the door When all her feelings wore her thin ..........she thought perhaps it was something Something she did Something she didn’t do But to be safe She roomed herself in a book And only took to slamming the door When her spirit broke Yes... again you capture the feelings and the emotions wrapped in such experiences. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Martie, my mom just got a piano yesterday.... I think she will like this one very much  I know I do.... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
But to be safe She roomed herself in a book And only took to slamming the door When her spirit broke A different parent, a different defiance... similar safety net. *S* Too familiar to be "enjoyed"... *sad smile*... but very much appreciated. Well written! |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Martie, what a beautiful language you are speaking. And, O, how thoughts can purify as they sing through the blending of music and poetry in sweet vapor. Thanks for teaching me new ways to sense and appreciate beautiful rays of truth. And now I will Hush! ((Martie)) -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher [This message has been edited by Silver Streak (03-07-2002 12:34 PM).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* I know this feeling so well...I had no piano so I lost myself in books and fantasy..it is still the way I protect myself from hurt and even painful memories....Magnificent writing that touched the core of me...**big big hugs** Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ok. I am never going to write again. I'm throwing out my pens, pencils, paper, notes, pads, letters, books... but not my computer, and not my link to Passions, and I am not throwing away my friendship with you... because I would read more like this! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwww, this is sooooooo beautifully touching, sweet friend, I too love to play the piano so much and when I have a feeling of sorrow in my mind, I always like to key the melody of my emotions because I feel it matches the somber sound of the keys! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, your words always sing with sweet music! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Yes, please give us more of these! Stars will shine when I am gone |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
He was the somber of the living room she thought perhaps it was something Something she did Something she didn't do But to be safe She roomed herself in a book And only took to slamming the door When her spirit broke ======================================== the mirrors...the mirrors... someone clean the tears off the mirrors. Your muse is awesome.... and Im smiling at Suns reply. So it seems your saving grace was only saving face, |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked it |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
marite - this is why i like so many of your poems... you take a "simple" idea and spin it around until it resembles something unique, yet still wholly identifiable. it's that shared understanding which makes for good poetry. peace C |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Martie.....sigh...for all of it. But the last line, such power....which, of course, it was, and poetry. Well done. Bob |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Lost in the memories Martiesque-music makes~ So very, very tenderly penned~ Yes ... I know the sound~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Martie your words make the music girl.You don't need a piano and I would never say to you. "Hush" I would say, " Speak On" lovely. floria Floria |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
She roomed herself in a book And only took to slamming the door When her spirit broke I love the way you use words, Martie...You are an exceptional poet.  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
*smiling through tears of remember here* ~Sometimes all you really wish for... |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
I like this, very well done. Stomp that piano! |
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