Open Poetry #19 |
Dream Blocker |
Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
A wall of steel and stone, red brick to quell all bound together and do the trick well A wall of gray blocking the heart of man letting true love not start once pure again Miles of ocean surrounded by vast land Deserts of flowing soft coppery sand Arid wasteland desolate and bone dry draws the moisture out of the dust filled eye Trek over mountain, forest and deep stream traveling on a prayer, hope and a dream Guided only by the heaven’s star light Lost in the vision of a beauty’s sight Taken through rugged terrain and earth past though this heart’s beat is becoming it’s last Yearning taste but once a moist kiss to feel This vision, no mirage, hauntingly real. Beating sun that scorches the earth and skin stealing soul of man from desolate sin. Left in the dust as the hungry birds pluck Died before dream’s waking....now out of luck! [This message has been edited by Magnus (03-07-2002 08:42 PM).] |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Magnus Hi there this is another excellent poem from you I love the journey of this one. You really are a very good writer. I swear I could feel the whole thing. Marvellous writing I’m particularly glad I get to answer before mum does, it gives me a sense of kudos, I know sad aren’t we. This really is excellent writing, you have some amazing skills. Well done Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Krissy, thank you...Do you and your mom fight over the computer....or do you have your own too.....We have three here at our home...Luckily, I have my own, thank goodness....Eeeeeek, what would I do IF.... IF there were no computers...no internet??? |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah, the grit of this was very good... |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Very well done Mangus...as usual. Always enjoy you. Me, we've one computer here and everyone knows its mine...m i n e... M-i-n-e -MINE DARN IT! Now let me have a turn!!! You're right, it does offer...'new life' in many ways... jwesley |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
KJ....taste the sand....Spuhhhh, spuhhhh!! Water.....please....water!!! Thanks... Jimmy.....yep, know the feeling...I had that problem once....but I HAD TO share... Thanks for reading my words...glad you enjoy them...as I do your own as well... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) This is sooooooo powerfully expressive, sweet friend, my heart goes out to all the dreams that people lose and disappear from their lives and I pray that new dreams will come and fill their heart forever with hope! (sigh) I have only one computer in my house, thank goodness my sisters don't like to use it too much! (smiles) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is excellent! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Barry Such wonderful imagery has been portrayed through this masterful piece of writing. Take care.....Sue Suetang |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Barry, thank you for my bedtime read... And an excellent one indeed. Now I'm off to lalaland....nite. ~hugs, Nancy~ ~Sometimes all you really wish for... |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Magnus darling boy oh if only, in fact Krissy does have her own computer at her OWN house, but….. she’s not got internet access there so she comes round to me and uses mine. It’s been fine up until now, because she’s only used her email account and left surfing and so on until I’m not actually using it. Now she’s joined PIP’s it’s a little different. In fact a lot different……… but I’m sure we’ll come to an amicable arrangement, or I’ll kill her, one or the other. Yes it’s true it’s unlikely I do utterly adore both my girls, doesn’t mean they don’t occasionally ruffle my feathers though This is a fabulous poem darling boy, utterly utterly fabulous, your writing this last week has been outstanding. It’s always good, this week it’s gone to the next level. I love it and having my computer back I get to say it my own way. It’s truly wonderful Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
Magnus You always have such a deep wonderful touch to your poems.. This one is not an exception. Thank you ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Magnus~ Just yesterday evening received this thought in an e-mail - DUST: Mud with the juice squeezed out. Mostly I enjoyed this line from you - 'Deserts of flowing soft coppery sand' Have a dream-awakening day~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Magnus, I get so into your poems that by the end of this one I was actually thirsty. Lovely write, a bit different from the romantic ones and I like the variety that you write so well. this is truly well written and Oh yes, we have three computers too. the third one is for my six year old grandchild. can you even believe that? LOL floria Floria |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
sounds like a pill. . .the Dream Blocker. . . well done Sir. . . I enjoyed. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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