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Full of Diamonds
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Full of Diamonds |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Full of Diamonds She felt his look from across the room and turned. His eyes moved slowly, she could feel them, not cold like marbles but more like feathers bold and silken. They touched her places and she trembled and looked at the flow of misty silk stir against her legs though she was still. For that was how it felt, his eyes, speaking her name once, though he said nothing, then reaching out to touch her hair there, where it fell behind her ear, he ran is fingers through until each strand was on fire. She looked once more but he still sat at the piano his fingers dancing across the keys and now, his eyes were closed. She shook her head and looked at the crystal glass she held and saw it was full of diamonds. The air was shimmering and she took a breath of drowning and sank her eyes into the red toenail that peeked from her shoe in wanton display of her feelings. When she looked again his back was turned and his laughter fell across the nape of her neck and collected all the tiny pieces of her sensuality and threw them like dice across the hardwood floor, and the song had ended. _________ 3-01 |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
If dear lady I dream in technicolor, you write in it. Wonderfully clear images and flow in this and an insight into the author perhaps... (can you tell I enjoyed this?) |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Sensuality sings from your words...*sigh*...why did it have to end...This poem transported me into a vision of sensual romance....I love the whole feel of it...**big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Excellent writing, enjoyed. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
This is one of your richest writes! I love it! Drat, I DO wish I had written this ... Into my library Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwww, this is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, your gorgeous words of passion always make me smile! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, such symphonies of magic always sing from your heart! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
For that was how it felt, his eyes, speaking her name once, though he said nothing, then reaching out to touch her hair there, where it fell behind her ear, he ran is fingers through until each strand was on fire. ===================================== She shook her head and looked at the crystal glass she held and saw it was full of diamonds. The air was shimmering and she took a breath of drowning and sank her eyes into the red toenail that peeked from her shoe in wanton display of her feelings. ========================================= one of my very faves of yours....I remember my first read...I yelled I WANT TO WRITE LIKE THIS WHEN I GROW UP!!  Love the slooooow burn. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
 I LOVE THIS! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
OHMYGOSH Martie!! I love this...!! Wow! I wanted it to go on and on and on....incredible imagery here my friend! Thank you for this keeper today! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Sometimes all you really wish for... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I remember this one well... and the fact that I still hum "killing me softly with his song" as I read is a compliment. *S* Your poem has the same power as the music... it draws the reader into another world so thoroughly the ending comes much too soon. *S* By the way... the title could describe your poetry. *S* |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Martie....Oh....PIFFLE. Bob PS Just teasing. But you must admit that the remark serves to enhance my reputation for being "stuffy". PPS Like the red toenail. Shall we vote on that? [This message has been edited by RMW (03-07-2002 02:32 PM).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetSis~ Shimmering with delicate moments of being ... *sighing in Florida* Love ya' *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
They touched her places and she trembled and looked at the flow of misty silk stir against her legs I love the sensuality of this one, Martie. You are a truly gifted and versatile poet. I love your work. ((hugs))copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Martie....only YOU can paint a poetic picture that puts your reader inside the poem... experiencing all of it as you do... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A treasure chest full of memory, for both the subject of the poem, and the reader, me... thank you for bringing this gem back, Martie... |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
Yes, very vivid and sensual. I hope this isn't a real experience, as it is so well done. Very good. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Martie....I have to agree with Sy........excellent writing! |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
I love this Martie..i felt like i was looking into that glass of diamonds..i felt like i was there..my favorite ~Victoria "Mistakes are the portals of discovery." |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
Martie what can I say but FABULOUS, absolutely FABULOUS. floria Floria |
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