Open Poetry #19 |
Dishes |
ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
what's cooking on my plate for today? spins on top of poles, sometimes stays, whirled delight, caught in continuous turns our spirts lie served, ambitions burn. platters of first and second courses twirl matters of the heart in constant whirl frenzied moments of lives done quick spin off the top of pole-like sticks lives in fast lanes are the dishes that spin gallant young gents throw their lives in bins to catch elusive roles, win fame 'toute de suite' takes more than spinning plates on steak spits. try your luck at the shooting galleries too variety of challenges in this great human zoo aim your muzzle at a target and win a prize maybe you'll walk home with a dished surprise! [This message has been edited by ecrivan (03-06-2002 10:00 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"try your luck at the shooting galleries too variety of challenges in this great human zoo aim your muzzle at a target and win a prize maybe you'll walk home with a dished surprise!" BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, this is such a powerful message, sweet friend, it almost sounds to me that rather than being forced to labor, as in cleaning dishes, we should all take aim at our dreams upon the shooting gallery of life and continue to strive for that bulls-eye with patience, in which we are all bound to hit the jackpot someday! (big huggsssss) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much, your words are always so edifying! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martin, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Martin darling boy Again flawless and perfectly presented. What can I say but this is exceptional. YOU always write brilliantly and today is no exception. YOU have such a fabulous talent and in this your portray it to pure perfection Wonderful flow and rhythm the rhyme is fabulous too, absolutely perfect Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
why thanks Marsha and Noah! |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
"platters of first and second courses twirl matters of the heart in constant whirl frenzied moments of lives done quick spin off the top of pole-like sticks" Martin - Great metaphor about life and matters of the heart. I hope I can get a dished surprise one day. Nice writing. Dave |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
enjoyed the read. ( I must admit, my first thought was of the Ed Sullivan show with the twirling plate act ) finely written as is the usual for your efforts. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Dave, one stupendous dish on its way soon.. don't swoon..hehe Tim, I thought of good old Ed too! |
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