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Silver Mine |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
You never look up anymore Are you tired of finding the line between the gray and white above Weary from digging in the silver mine You’re an angel enveloped by your wings, where you huddle quietly and cry So upset with your fruitless efforts, to the point where you won’t even try For rainbows are too long to travel, and it is tough to toil in the sky And it is hard to fight for tomorrow when you believe the storm clouds will not dry So abandon the silver mine, though it is a waste, a lurid sin For it still contains so many treasures of promise, of what could have been © David 2002 [This message has been edited by GenXer (03-06-2002 07:25 PM).] |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggsssssss) Awwwwww, this is such a beautiful message, sweet friend, may we all find gold in our own hopes and dreams and cherish each moment to the present and have faith that he will help us through the laboring of each day! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is excellent! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet David, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
" You’re an angel enveloped by your wings, where you huddle quietly and cry So upset with your fruitless efforts, to the point where you won’t even try ******************************************** So abandon the silver mine, though it is a waste, a lurid sin For it still contains so many treasures of promise, of what could have been" wow, this is amazing touching here..... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
So abandon the silver mine, though it is a waste, a lurid sin For it still contains so many treasures of promise, of what could have been ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Truly amazing write here Dave! Enjoyed thoroughly tonight! ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~Sometimes all you really wish for... |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
For rainbows are too long to travel, and it is tough to toil in the sky And it is hard to fight for tomorrow when you believe the storm clouds will not dry So abandon the silver mine, though it is a waste, a lurid sin For it still contains so many treasures of promise, of what could have been ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ beautiful.... haunting.... so sad & tired Connie |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Dave darling boy oh this is sooooooo good. Truly outstanding, as always, you are such a fine poet. I love the way you’ve written this, it’s utterly superb, the flow is divine all the way through. Your use of perfect imagery abound in this truly this is excellent writing. Now jacket tie and shirt you say? I thought we’d gone past three anyway Weren’t you up to nine or ten? I thought I heard you mumble then? But if you’re stuck on number three I’ll be gentle Dave just follow me You’ll be asking is there more? Leave it to me and soon you'll soar This really is an excellent piece darling boy, you have excelled yourself. Wonderful writing utterly wonderful    Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I saw more in the title than just the two words, and once again, you did not let me be disappointed... and for that, I thank you... |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* let the past go and move into the hope and promise of a new tomorrow...Stunning...I am left in awe of your words....I love it...**big hugs**  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Dave, This is definately one of my favorites from you. Beautifully written.. Hugs, Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
You’re an angel enveloped by your wings, where you huddle quietly and cry So upset with your fruitless efforts, to the point where you won’t even try this is sad..feelings by so many..nicely done Dave.. ~Vic "Mistakes are the portals of discovery." |
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GenXer Senior Member
since 2001-12-15
Posts 583USA |
Thank you all for reading this. Dave |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Dave, what a weary write...magnificently done of course. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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N orth Carolina Girl Senior Member
since 2001-12-04
Posts 962NC,USA |
Dave,I thought I would send this little guy to help you mine the silver mine.Great poem as always my New York friend!  Your down south friend, Juanita |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
David this is beautiful. don't know how I missed it but glad I found it. great poem. floriaFloria |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Written with a great deal of sensitivity, Dave...and beautifully too!  copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Dave, very nicely done...and the message is so clear.... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
For rainbows are too long to travel, and it is tough to toil in the sky And it is hard to fight for tomorrow when you believe the storm clouds will not dry =========================== The cadence in this was superb... it reads with melodics and has unique theme and imagery... the silver mine inspire was intriguing. very cool writing poet sir. Awake again I can't pretend ... and I know I'm alone ... |
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